自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation and repetition. For example, say you owned a bike, mention how old you were and one memory or reason you liked it.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was about eight, and I used to ride it to school and around the neighborhood every day, which helped me feel independent.

建議: Use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary; give a topic sentence then two specific reasons with linking words. Replace vague phrases like “too much popular” and “reduced time cost” with natural expressions. Keep it to no more than five sentences and avoid filler sounds.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. Firstly, they are relatively affordable compared with cars, so many people choose them to save money; secondly, they can be faster than walking or waiting for buses in congested areas, which saves time.

× Yes, I have a a a bike when I I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past context 'when I was a child.' Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Also remove repeated words 'a a a' and duplicate 'I'. Include the article 'a' before 'child' to form 'a child.' Suggestion: Keep the verb tense consistent with the time expression (use past tense for past time references) and proofread to remove duplication.

× Yes, bike is too much popular in our country because bike is uh, affordable and it's uh, reduced time cost.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because they are affordable and reduce travel time.

The original uses singular 'bike' where a general statement requires the plural 'bikes' and lacks correct subject-verb agreement. 'Too much popular' is incorrect; use 'very popular' or 'too popular' depending on meaning. 'It's reduced time cost' is unclear and ungrammatical; use 'reduce travel time' or 'save time.' Also replace repeated 'bike' with the pronoun 'they.' Suggestion: Use plural for generalizations ('Bikes are...'), choose appropriate adverb collocations ('very popular'), and use clear verbs for effects ('reduce travel time').