自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Pronunciation and accuracy: correct mispronounced words (try → tiny?; bite → bike; draining wheels → training wheels) and remove unnecessary or unclear words. Structure: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences. Cohesion: use simple linking words (for example, then, after) to show sequence. Content: add a brief specific detail such as where you practiced and how long it took to learn to make your answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child my parents bought me a small bike with training wheels, and I began practising in the park when I was about four. My older sister helped me at first, and after a few weeks I managed to ride without the training wheels.

建議: Clarity and grammar: correct major errors (e.g. “were where our wars very populist” → “were very popular”) and use correct articles and plural forms (a car → cars). Structure: begin with a direct opinion sentence (Yes/No or They are/They were), then give specific reasons and an example. Cohesion: use linking words such as because, for example, and especially to connect reasons. Content: finish your final clause — avoid trailing off — and include a present-day comparison if relevant (e.g. now more people have cars).

範例: Yes, bicycles have been and still are popular in my country. They were especially common in the past because they are inexpensive and many people could not afford cars. For example, people often used bikes for short trips, commuting to work or carrying goods in rural areas, although car ownership has increased recently.

× 'When I was a try my parents bought me a small bite with a draining wheels so I could learn to ride a bike, and I started practicing in the park when I was about four years old.'

✓ 'When I was a child my parents bought me a small bike with training wheels so I could learn to ride, and I started practicing in the park when I was about four years old.'

'try' and 'bite' are incorrect word choices causing sentence structure and meaning errors; the sentence structure is also awkward with extra words. Replace 'try' with 'child' to match the intended meaning, and 'bite' with 'bike'. Change 'draining wheels' to 'training wheels' and simplify 'learn to ride a bike' to 'learn to ride' for clarity. Ensure correct word order: 'When I was a child, my parents bought me a small bike with training wheels so I could learn to ride, and I started practicing in the park when I was about four years old.' Suggestion: proofread for wrong keying or homophone errors and read the sentence aloud to check meaning.'

× 'My older sister helped me at first and after a few weeks I could ride with.'

✓ 'My older sister helped me at first and after a few weeks I could ride by myself.'

'ride with' is incomplete and causes a sentence structure problem; the intended meaning is independence, which requires 'by myself' or 'on my own'. This is a sentence structure/subject-complement issue. Suggestion: use complete prepositional phrases to show manner or accompaniment (e.g., 'ride with someone' or 'ride by myself').'},{

× 'In the past, bicycles were where our wars very populist in my country because they were inexpensive and many people could not afford car.'

✓ 'In the past, bicycles were very popular in my country because they were inexpensive and many people could not afford a car.'

'were where our wars very populist' contains multiple incorrect words and word order, creating a present tense/word-choice/structure error. Replace the phrase with 'were very popular'. Also 'afford car' is missing the article 'a', so add 'a car'. Suggestion: keep the past tense 'were' and use correct adjective 'popular', and include articles before singular countable nouns.'

× 'People used them for short trips, commuting to work or carrying goods, especially in rural areas where they.'

✓ 'People used them for short trips, commuting to work, or carrying goods, especially in rural areas where they still are.'

'where they' is a sentence fragment causing a sentence structure error; it lacks a verb or completion. Completing it as 'where they still are' or 'where they still are common' fixes the fragment and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: ensure clauses have verbs and complete ideas; avoid leaving relative clauses unfinished.'