自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 시제 사용을 정확히 고치고 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 예를 들어 과거 경험(‘had’, ‘taught’)과 현재 상태(‘don't ride’)를 구분해 표현하고, 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 또한 주제문을 명확히 제시한 뒤 연결어(for example, but, so)를 사용해 이유를 덧붙이면 더 일관된 답이 됩니다.

範例: Yes, I did. My father taught me how to ride when I was about seven, and I used to ride it often around the neighborhood. However, I don't ride much now because I haven't used it for years, so I prefer walking or taking public transport.

建議: 주제문을 더 분명히 하고 구체적인 이유와 예를 들어 내용을 풍부하게 만드세요. 연결어를 사용하여 이유와 예시를 자연스럽게 이어주고, 단수·복수와 관사 사용을 정확히 하세요 (예: "bikes are", "one of the most efficient and convenient means").

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, especially among students and commuters. They are inexpensive and convenient for short trips, so many people choose them to avoid traffic and save money. For example, at my university most students cycle to class during the week.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The noun 'child' needs the article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun. Use 'a child' for correct noun phrase construction.

× My dad teached me how to ride a bike, but I don't ride a bike these days because I didn't ride it for a long time.

✓ My dad taught me how to ride a bike, but I don't ride a bike these days because I haven't ridden it for a long time.

1) 'Teached' is incorrect; the past tense of 'teach' is 'taught'. 2) The clause 'because I didn't ride it for a long time' describes a period continuing to the present, so the present perfect 'haven't ridden' is appropriate to link past experience with the present. Also keep consistent subject and tense.

× Yes, it is definitely because people especially students like me move in their town.

✓ Yes, definitely, because people, especially students like me, move around in their towns.

1) The original sentence uses 'it is definitely because...' which is awkward; removing 'it' makes the sentence natural. 2) Add commas around the phrase 'especially students like me' as a parenthetical. 3) Use the phrasal verb 'move around' for 'travel within' and plural 'towns' or better 'town' depending on meaning; 'their towns' matches 'people' as plural.

× So bicycle is one of the most efficient and convenient vehicle.

✓ So bicycles are some of the most efficient and convenient vehicles.

When using 'one of the' you must use plural form after 'one of the' (e.g., 'one of the most... vehicles'). Alternatively, if speaking generally, use plural 'bicycles' and plural 'vehicles'. Also 'vehicle' must agree in plural with 'bicycles'.