自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use past simple consistently) and avoid repetition. For example, say when you had it, who bought it, and why it was important with one linking word.

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was in primary school because my father bought it for me, and I loved it because it gave me freedom to explore the neighbourhood.

建議: Organize your response with a clear opinion, a reason, and a concise example. Use correct tense ("ten years ago" not "in ten years ago") and avoid filler phrases. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas and be specific about trends or facts.

範例: I don't think bikes are very popular now. Ten years ago they were more common, but now many people prefer cars because there are more cars on the roads and public transport has improved, so cycling has declined in cities.

× I remembered that.

✓ I remember that.

The student uses 'remembered' (simple past) while referring to a childhood possession in a context where present recollection is natural. The preceding question asked about having a bike when they were a child, and 'I remember that' (present tense) correctly expresses a memory. Use present simple for current states or memories: 'I remember that.' Suggestion: Use present tense 'remember' to state a current recollection.

× It's my primary school.

✓ It was when I was in primary school.

The sentence 'It's my primary school' is unclear and structurally incorrect for describing when the event happened. The student intends to say the bike was from their time in primary school. Use a temporal clause: 'It was when I was in primary school.' Suggestion: Provide clear temporal context with 'when I was in...'.

× My father brought me a new bike.

✓ My father bought me a new bike.

'Brought' is the past of 'bring' (to carry towards the speaker), but the intended meaning is that the father purchased the bike, which requires 'bought' (past of 'buy'). Also 'bought me' is natural in this context. Suggestion: Use 'bought' when referring to purchasing.

× That's my first bike.

✓ That was my first bike.

The event is being described in the past, so the verb 'to be' should be in past tense 'was' rather than present 'is'. Use past tense to maintain consistency: 'That was my first bike.' Suggestion: Keep past tense for past events.

× I really loved that.

✓ I really loved it.

The pronoun 'that' is acceptable, but 'it' is more natural referring to the bike. Also 'loved' is past tense which is appropriate here. Change 'that' to 'it' for natural object reference. Suggestion: Use 'it' when referring back to a specific object already mentioned.

× I don't think so.

✓ I don't think so.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present opinion context. No change needed.

× You know, if you asked that in ten years ago, yes that would be popular but now I don't think so

✓ You know, if you had asked that ten years ago, then yes, they would have been popular, but now I don't think so.

The original mixes conditional forms incorrectly. For a counterfactual referring to the past, use the past perfect in the if-clause ('if you had asked') and 'would have' or 'would have been' for the result. Also 'ten years ago' should not include 'in' with the conditional phrasing. Use 'they' to refer to bikes. Suggestions: Use 'If you had asked ten years ago' + 'they would have been popular.' Suggestion: Use third conditional for unreal past situations: 'If you had asked ten years ago, they would have been popular.'

× but now I don't think so because there were so many cars in the road rolling back on the road,

✓ but now I don't think so because there are so many cars on the road.

The sentence has tense and preposition errors. 'There were' (past) conflicts with 'now'; use present 'there are'. The preposition 'in the road' is incorrect; use 'on the road'. The phrase 'rolling back on the road' is unnecessary and unclear, so remove it. Suggestion: Say 'there are so many cars on the road.'

× I don't think that's a really I think that's a really

✓ I don't think bikes are really popular now.

This fragment is repetitive and incomplete. It should be combined into a clear statement about current popularity. Use a noun 'bikes' as subject and state the opinion: 'I don't think bikes are really popular now.' Suggestion: Avoid repetition and complete the clause with a clear subject and predicate.