自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence addressing the question, then give concise supporting details. Correct verb tenses and avoid irrelevant words. Use linking words (for example, "but" or "so") properly and keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences. Be specific about timing and reasons.

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. However, I stopped riding for a while after a small accident, so I felt nervous about cycling. Later, when I was about twelve, I practiced regularly with my parents and regained confidence.

建議: Clarify the opinion and give specific reasons and examples. Use correct sentence structure and vocabulary (for example, 'in my country' not 'in my current'). Avoid unclear words like 'gun'. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'however', 'for example') and give at least one specific reason why bikes are or are not popular.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars, which are faster and more convenient. For example, commuters often drive to work due to long distances and limited cycling lanes, so cycling is mostly for recreation.

× When I was a child, I Larry ride a bicycle because I am fed up an accident.

✓ When I was a child, I rarely rode a bicycle because I was afraid of accidents.

The original has incorrect word 'Larry' (likely 'rarely') and wrong verb forms. Errors: incorrect pronoun/use of name? mainly lexical error and past tense. According to list, map to 'Incorrect use of pronouns' (ID 12) because a personal word is misplaced. Correction uses 'rarely' (adverb) and past tense 'rode' and 'was afraid of accidents' to match past timeframe. Suggestion: use appropriate adverb ('rarely') and past simple for past habits, and use 'afraid of' or 'scared of' rather than 'fed up an accident'. Note: If more precise mapping is preferred, this sentence also involves past tense and vocabulary errors; ensure past simple for completed past habits and correct lexical choices.

× So when I grow up I try to practice and I breathe more to ride a bicycle.

✓ So when I grew up I tried to practice and I tried to build up my confidence to ride a bicycle.

The sentence describes past events but uses present tense 'grow' and 'try'. Per list, this is a present tense issue (ID 6). Use past simple 'grew' and 'tried' to match the past timeframe. 'Breathe more' is incorrect; replace with 'build up my confidence' or 'practice more to feel comfortable'. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent for past narratives and use natural expressions for improving skill or confidence.

× In my current bike not popular because the people usually use a car gun bike because it's convenient and fast.

✓ Bicycles are not very popular in my country because people usually use cars or motorbikes since they are convenient and fast.

The original sentence has jumbled structure, missing auxiliary verb, incorrect word 'gun', and inconsistent noun references. Map to 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26). Correction introduces a clear subject 'Bicycles', correct verb 'are not very popular', and replaces 'car gun bike' with 'cars or motorbikes'. It also uses 'since' to link reason. Suggestion: start with a clear subject, use correct plural nouns and appropriate conjunctions, and maintain logical sentence order.