自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, tense consistency and sentence order. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Keep answers natural and concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). For example, use past simple for childhood facts, avoid contractions that are ungrammatical, and fix word order in questions/statements.

範例: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a bicycle when I was six, and I rode it often around my neighborhood. However, I no longer have it because I can’t remember where it was left, so I drive a car now.

建議: Provide a clear opinion sentence, then add specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Use plural forms correctly and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "motorbikes" or "motorcycles"). Avoid vague phrasing and improve cohesion with connectors like "because", "so", or "therefore".

範例: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting, so they cope better with traffic and longer distances.

× Of course I have ones.

✓ Of course I had one.

The student used the incorrect pronoun and tense. 'Ones' is wrong contextually; the speaker refers to a single bike so use the singular noun 'one'. Also the question asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the verb should be past tense 'had' rather than present 'have'. Suggestion: use 'I had one' to match singular reference and past time.

× My mom brought it to me since I was six years old.

✓ My mom gave it to me when I was six years old.

The verb 'brought' plus 'to me' is awkward here and the time expression is incorrect: 'since I was six years old' is used with present perfect to indicate a continuing situation. For a single past event, use 'when' and a simple past verb. 'Gave' or 'brought' without 'to' can work; 'My mom gave it to me when I was six years old' is clear and grammatically correct.

× But now I'm didn't remember where is it, so I drive a car now.

✓ But now I don't remember where it is, so I drive a car.

Mixed and incorrect tense forms were used. 'I'm didn't remember' is ungrammatical; to state a present lack of memory use simple present 'I don't remember'. Also word order in 'where is it' is the question order; in a statement use 'where it is'. 'So I drive a car now' can be simplified to 'so I drive a car' or 'so I drive a car now' but keep consistent present tense. Suggestion: 'But now I don't remember where it is, so I drive a car.'

× In my opinion, bicycle is not popular in my country.

✓ In my opinion, bicycles are not popular in my country.

The noun 'bicycle' needs plural form when speaking generally about the category. Use the plural 'bicycles' and plural verb 'are' to indicate general statements about more than one item. Suggestion: 'bicycles are not popular.'

× Most people will use motor bicycle because it's faster than a bicycle and smaller that make them.

✓ Most people use motorcycles because they are faster and smaller to maintain.

Several issues: 'motor bicycle' is incorrect — use 'motorcycle' or 'motorbike'. The modal 'will' is unnecessary for habitual actions; simple present 'use' is better. 'It's faster than a bicycle' is okay but maintain plurality and pronoun agreement: 'they are faster than bicycles.' The clause 'and smaller that make them' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended to mean 'and smaller so they are easier to store or maintain' — choose a clear reason like 'smaller and easier to park' or 'smaller and easier to maintain.' Suggested correction: 'Most people use motorcycles because they are faster and easier to park.'