自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with tense consistency and natural phrasing. Say the main idea in one clear sentence using past tense (e.g., “I had a bike when I was three”). Then add one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector (because/and/which). Avoid short choppy sentences and unnecessary repetition.

範例: I had a bike when I was about three years old, and it was a bright red model that my father bought for me. I loved riding it in the park because it had training wheels that made me feel safe.

建議: Give a clearer general statement, use plural nouns correctly, and support it with a specific reason or example linked by a connector (for example/because). Avoid repeating the same idea. Be concise and natural.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work, especially in congested cities where cycling is faster than driving. For example, you often see dedicated bike lanes and commuters parking bikes near office buildings.

× Yes, I have one when I was three years old.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was three years old.

The student uses the present tense 'have' with a past time phrase 'when I was three years old'. This is a tense error (Present tense issue vs Past tense issue). Use the simple past 'had' to match the past time reference: 'I had one when I was three years old.' Suggestion: Always align verb tense with the time expression; for past time expressions use past simple verbs.

× Yes, it's popular because they use it when they go to work.

✓ Yes, they're popular because people use them when they go to work.

There is a mismatch between the singular 'it's' (it is) and the plural referent 'bikes', and between the plural subject 'they' and the singular object 'it'. This is a subject-verb/pronoun agreement problem (Third person singular issue and Subject-verb agreement). Use plural forms consistently: 'bikes' -> 'they are' or 'they're', and refer to them as 'them' in the object position: 'people use them.' Suggestion: Keep number consistent—if the noun is plural (bikes), use plural verbs and pronouns.

× I mean, some people use it when they go into work.

✓ I mean, some people use them when they go to work.

The phrase 'go into work' is nonstandard; the common collocation is 'go to work'. Also the pronoun 'it' is singular while 'people' implies plural objects, so use 'them'. This is an incorrect use of preposition and pronoun. Suggestion: Use the standard preposition 'to' with 'go' ('go to work') and match pronoun number with its noun ('them' for plural 'bikes').