自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and relevance. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., Yes, I had a bike when I was a child), then give one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense for past experiences, correct verb forms, and linking words (for example, "because" or "and"). Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Avoid repeating unrelated words like "buy everyday."

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it home from school every day with my best friend, and we often explored the nearby park after classes. Because we loved cycling, we learned basic bike maintenance together, such as fixing a flat tire.

建議: Make the opinion clear and support it with specific, logical reasons and correct grammar. Use present-simple for general statements (e.g., "Bikes are popular"). Give concrete evidence or examples (commuting, students, bike lanes) and use linking words like "because," "for example," or "therefore." Avoid vague or repetitive phrases such as "buy everyday."

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many students and workers use them for short trips. For example, students often cycle to and from school, and some cities have dedicated bike lanes that make riding safer and more convenient.

× Yes, I buy everyday when I'm after school I buy with my best friend.

✓ Yes, I bought a bike when I was a child. I bought it after school with my best friend.

The student used present tense verbs (buy, I'm) but the question asks about the past (when you were a child), so past tense is required. Also the original sentence is awkward and missing objects. Suggestion: use past simple 'bought' for completed actions in the past and explicitly mention 'a bike' and the object 'it' for clarity.

× Yes I think bikes are popular in my country because every after school Sur student they buy everyday.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because many students buy them after school every day.

The original sentence mixes awkward time expressions and uses present tense correctly for general statements, but has word order and quantifier errors. 'Every after school Sur student' is ungrammatical; use 'many students' or 'students' and place 'after school' or 'every day' in natural positions. Also avoid repeating subject with 'they' after an explicit plural noun. Use 'buy them' to refer to bikes.