自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I had a bicycle as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g. “PSI”, “used to know that”). Use correct verb forms and articles.

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was about seven, and I used it to ride to school and play with friends. Because it was lightweight and easy to handle, I learned to ride confidently within a few weeks.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and correct vocabulary. Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g. “22 Wheeler”, “con convenient”). Use linking words like “because” or “for example” and correct grammar for reasons and results.

範例: Yes, motorbikes are very popular in my country. They are practical in heavy traffic because they are smaller and more maneuverable, so people can reach their destinations faster. For example, many commuters prefer motorbikes as they are cheaper to run and have good fuel efficiency.

× PSI had a bicycle.

✓ I had a bicycle.

The student typed 'PSI' instead of the pronoun 'I'. This is a typographical error causing an incorrect pronoun. Replace 'PSI' with 'I' to correctly refer to oneself.

× I did not have petrol or electric vehicle because I was too young for that and my parents bought me a bicycle.

✓ I did not have a petrol or electric vehicle because I was too young for that, and my parents bought me a bicycle.

The original sentence is missing an article before 'petrol or electric vehicle' and needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to connect two independent clauses. Add 'a' before 'petrol or electric vehicle' and a comma to improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So I I used to know that.

✓ So I used to know that.

The sentence contains a duplicated pronoun 'I I', which is a typographical/repetition error. Remove the extra 'I'. Note: 'used to know' is an odd collocation in this context; consider replacing with 'So I knew that' for clearer past knowledge expression.

× Yes, motorbikes are quite popular in my country because it is a 22 Wheeler bike so it is quite con convenient when there is a traffic jam.

✓ Yes, motorbikes are quite popular in my country because a 2-wheeler bike is very convenient when there is a traffic jam.

There is a mismatch between the plural subject 'motorbikes' and the singular phrase 'it is a 22 Wheeler bike'. Also '22 Wheeler' is incorrect for motorcycles; likely intended '2-wheeler'. 'con convenient' is a typo. Use 'a 2-wheeler bike is very convenient' to match number and correct terminology.

× So people buy these kinds of bikes and it is also have good mileage.

✓ So people buy these kinds of bikes, and they also have good mileage.

The clause 'it is also have good mileage' is ungrammatical: 'it is have' mixes verb forms. Because 'these kinds of bikes' is plural, use the plural subject 'they' and the correct verb 'have'. Add a comma before 'and' to connect clauses.