自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 文法と時制の誤り、語順や単語選択の間違いが多く、発話が繰り返しで不自然です。まず過去の話なので過去形を一貫して使い、不要な反復を避け、簡潔な主題文と具体的な補足を加えてください。また“loaded”や“go flying”は不適切な語彙なので、適切な動詞（e.g. rode, rode around, played）を使い、友達とどこで何をしたかを具体的に説明すると良いです。例文では一文目で主題を述べ、二〜三文で具体例や感情を述べ、接続詞（and, so, because）でつなぎます。

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends, and we would race each other to the park. I really enjoyed cycling because it made me feel free and it was a fun way to spend time outdoors.

建議: 繰り返し（"I think I think"）や言い直し、未完成の文があり、明確で具体的な理由や例が不足しています。まず一度だけ意見を述べ、その理由を具体的に説明してください。統計や日常の観察（通勤・通学で使われる、地域差がある、公共交通機関との比較など）を簡潔に付け加えると説得力が増します。接続詞（for example, because, however）を使って論理をつなぎ、文は過去形や現在形を正確に使い分けてください。

範例: I don’t think bicycles are very popular across all of Japan. Many people use them for short trips to work or school, especially in suburban areas, but in big cities most commuters prefer trains and buses because public transport is more convenient and reliable.

× Yes, I had a bike when I am a child and I often loaded my bike near my house with my friend.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I often rode my bike near my house with my friend.

You used present tense 'am' with a past reference 'had' — this is a tense inconsistency. Use past tense 'was' for time in the past. 'Loaded' is incorrect for riding a bicycle; the correct verb is 'ride' (past 'rode'). Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past events and use appropriate verbs for actions (was, rode).

× I enjoyed I enjoyed bicycle and go go flying.

✓ I enjoyed riding my bicycle and going very fast.

This sentence repeats phrases and mixes verb forms incorrectly. 'Enjoy' takes a gerund, so use 'enjoyed riding'. 'Bicycle' needs a determiner and possessive if appropriate ('my bicycle'). 'Go go flying' is unclear and ungrammatical; to express going fast on a bike use 'going very fast' or 'riding fast'. Remove repetition and use gerunds after 'enjoyed'.

× I think I think bikes are not so popular in Japan.

✓ I think bikes are not very popular in Japan.

This sentence repeats 'I think' and uses 'not so' which is informal but not strictly wrong; repetition is redundant. Replace 'not so' with 'not very' for natural phrasing and remove duplicate 'I think'. Maintain present tense for a general truth.

× Someone use bikes when they go to to work or school but I even know

✓ Some people use bikes when they go to work or school, but I don't know many who do.

'Someone' is odd here; use 'some people' for general statements. Subject-verb agreement: 'someone use' should be 'someone uses' but changing to 'some people use' avoids this. The phrase 'to to' is a typo; remove duplicate 'to'. 'But I even know' is incomplete and unclear; provide a complete clause such as 'but I don't know many who do' to convey the intended meaning. Maintain present tense for general habits.