自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details (for example: who owned the bike, how often you used it, a brief memory). Use linking words (and, so, because) appropriately and avoid filler words like “actually,” “yeah,” and repeated phrases. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. I shared my sister’s bicycle throughout my childhood and rode it almost every day after school. Riding helped me learn balance and gave me a lot of confidence, so it became one of my favourite activities.

建議: Answer directly and organise reasons clearly. Start with a topic sentence stating whether bikes are popular, then give two clear, specific reasons (for example: short distances between places; lower cost and limited car ownership). Use linking words (for example, because, so, therefore) correctly and avoid vague or contradictory phrases like “not specifically… but”. Keep sentences simple and precise.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Because many towns are compact and distances are short, people often prefer bicycles for short trips, and since cars are expensive for many families, cycling is an affordable and convenient option.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The verb phrase 'did have' is grammatically correct but unnecessary in a simple past statement; use the simple past 'had' for clarity and naturalness. Suggestion: use 'I had' for straightforward past-tense statements.

× However, it was not my own, it was my sister's and we used to share it together.

✓ However, it was not mine; it was my sister's and we used to share it.

Use the possessive pronoun 'mine' instead of 'my own' for concision, and 'share it together' is redundant because 'share' already implies togetherness. Suggestion: replace 'my own' with 'mine' and remove 'together.'

× For my childhood I used to love bicycle riding actually because it's it's really awesome to do so because you have to learn how to balance your body and everything.

✓ When I was a child, I used to love riding a bicycle because it was really fun; you have to learn how to balance your body and so on.

The phrase 'For my childhood' is incorrect; use 'When I was a child.' 'Bicycle riding' is better expressed as 'riding a bicycle' or 'riding bikes.' 'It's it's' is a redundancy and the tense should match past 'used to' so use 'it was.' Also 'and everything' is informal; use 'and so on' or remove it. Suggestion: restructure sentence for correct preposition and consistent past tense.

× Yeah. So I did use to have a bicycle.

✓ Yes, so I did use to have a bicycle.

This sentence is awkward; 'did use to' is acceptable but 'used to' is more natural. Also punctuation and filler 'Yeah' can be 'Yes.' Suggestion: say 'Yes, I used to have a bicycle.'

× Yes, they are because not specifically in my country I would say, but in my town specifically and in the country itself as well because my country is not much of developed country and unlike in the developed countries they have different types of cars and everything.

✓ Yes, they are, not necessarily throughout the whole country but especially in my town and in rural areas, because my country is not very developed and, unlike developed countries, people often rely less on many types of cars.

Pronoun and article use is confusing: 'they are' lacks a clear reference but context implies 'bikes.' The phrase 'not much of developed country' is ungrammatical; use 'not very developed' or 'not a very developed country.' 'Unlike in the developed countries they have different types of cars' needs rewording: remove extra articles and clarify contrast. Suggestion: clarify reference to 'bikes,' use 'not very developed,' and restructure the contrast.

× But in my country the distance are very short.

✓ But in my country the distances are very short.

Subject 'distance' should be plural 'distances' to match plural verb 'are' and the intended meaning of multiple journeys/places. Suggestion: use plural 'distances' when referring to typical short distances between places.

× That's why riding bicycles is easy.

✓ That's why riding bicycles is easy.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Explanation: 'Riding' as a gerund is correctly used after 'That's why' to express general truth.