自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details, and finish with a short personal comment. Avoid filler words (like "like") and redundant phrases. Also correct tense and small grammar slips (e.g. "I got it when I was four or five" not "I got it. I have when I was..."). Use linking words (for example, "and", "so", "because") to make the story coherent.

範例: Yes — I had a bike as a child. It was a blue, unicorn‑themed bike with red sparkles, and I got it when I was about four or five. I shared a matching bike with my cousin, so we would often ride to the park together, which was one of my favorite childhood activities.

建議: Begin with a clear direct answer, then give two specific reasons using linking words for clarity. Reduce repetition (avoid saying "I don't think" twice) and correct small grammar/word choices (e.g. "rain" not "raining", "dangerous to ride a bike"). Try to use one varied vocabulary item (e.g. "prevalent" or "common") to show range.

範例: No, bikes aren't very popular in my country. Firstly, summers are extremely hot, which makes cycling exhausting, and secondly, autumn and winter bring heavy rain, so riding a bike can be unsafe. For these reasons, cycling is not a common mode of transport where I live.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is grammatically acceptable for emphasis, but simple past 'had' is more natural and concise in this context. Use the simple past for completed actions in the past without emphasis.

× I got it.

✓ I got it when I was four or five.

The sentence 'I got it.' is grammatically correct but incomplete in context because the next clause provides the time. Combining them clarifies meaning and improves cohesion: place the time expression after the verb to complete the idea.

× I have when I was like four or five it was a matching bike with my cousin.

✓ I got it when I was around four or five; it was a matching bike with my cousin.

The original mixes present tense 'have' with a past time expression 'when I was...'. Use past tense 'got' to match the time frame. Also add punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× She's like nine months younger than me so we had this like unicorn matching bike together that we used to go to park with

✓ She was about nine months younger than me, so we had matching unicorn bikes that we used to go to the park with.

Use past tense 'was' to match the past narrative. Replace informal fillers 'like' with 'about' for clarity. 'Matching unicorn bikes' is more natural than 'unicorn matching bike'. Include the article 'the' before 'park' and place preposition 'with' at end of clause; rephrase to avoid ending awkwardly.

× No, I don't think so.

✓ No, I don't think so.

This sentence is correct: present simple 'don't think' is appropriate for stating an opinion about the present.

× I don't really see that many people riding bikes in general because the weather is so bad most of the year it's either very hot in the summer so it will be very exhausting to ride bikes or in this fall and winter, there's so much raining that it would be dangerous to ride bike.

✓ I don't really see many people riding bikes in general because the weather is bad for most of the year: either it is very hot in summer, which makes riding a bike exhausting, or in autumn and winter there is so much rain that it would be dangerous to ride a bike.

Problems include run-on sentence, incorrect articles, wrong season name 'this fall' (use 'autumn' or 'in autumn/winter'), incorrect verb forms 'there's so much raining' (use 'there is so much rain'), and missing articles before 'bike'. Break into clauses, use correct verb forms and articles, and choose consistent tense (present simple) for general statements.

× So I don't think it's that popular.

✓ So I don't think it's that popular.

This sentence is correct. 'It' refers to the general activity of cycling; present simple 'is' is appropriate.