自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сформулируйте ответ более ясно и грамматически корректно: начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте 1–2 поясняющих предложения с конкретикой. Избегайте повтора слов и смешения времен; используйте простые конструкции прошедшего времени (I had / I wanted / I was afraid). Пример плана: 1) краткий ответ; 2) причина или подробность; 3) итог или эмоция. Также замените неясные фразы («drums»?) на точные слова (например, «falling», «heights», «raising my hands»).

範例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child, but I wanted one very much. I was afraid of falling and of riding on busy roads, so my parents didn’t buy me one. In the end, I only learnt to cycle when I was a teenager.

建議: Отвечайте прямо и добавляйте конкретные подробности и примеры. Начните с краткого мнения, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных наблюдения (напр., кто использует велосипеды, где их больше видно) и завершите выводом. Исправьте грамматику: "bikes are not popular", "people travel by car or bus", "I rarely see pupils with bikes". Используйте связки: "because", "for example", "however" для логики ответа.

範例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer to travel by car or bus. For example, I usually see commuters and families using cars, and only occasionally students riding bicycles to school. However, bikes are becoming a bit more common in parks and near universities.

× When I was a child I dreamed to have a bike, but also I scared of drums or to raise my hands or another things and I and I was very afraid of this and if I were a child I would like to have a bike.

✓ When I was a child I dreamed of having a bike, but I was also afraid of drums, of raising my hands, and of other things, so I was very scared; if I were a child now I would like to have a bike.

Ошибка в использовании глагола после 'dream' и конструкции после предлога: в английском после 'dream' обычно используется 'dream of doing' или 'dream about doing', поэтому нужно использовать форму с -ing: 'dreamed of having'. Также после предлогов ('of') используется герундий ('raising'). Повторение 'I and I' является избыточным; предложение нужно разделить и уточнить. Советы: использовать 'dream of doing', после предлогов использовать герундий, разбивать длинные предложения на более короткие для ясности.

× When I was a child I dreamed to have a bike, but also I scared of drums or to raise my hands or another things and I and I was very afraid of this and if I were a child I would like to have a bike.

✓ When I was a child I dreamed of having a bike, but I was also scared of drums, of raising my hands, and of other things, so I was very afraid; if I were a child now I would like to have a bike.

Используется неверное прилагательное/стать 'scared' без вспомогательного глагола 'be' в нужной форме. Правильная структура: 'I was scared of ...' или 'I was afraid of ...'. Рекомендация: употреблять связку 'be + adjective' для выражения эмоций и избегать повторов.

× When I was a child I dreamed to have a bike, but also I scared of drums or to raise my hands or another things and I and I was very afraid of this and if I were a child I would like to have a bike.

✓ When I was a child I dreamed of having a bike, but I was also scared of drums, of raising my hands, and of other things, so I was very afraid; if I were a child now I would like to have a bike.

Фраза 'another things' неверна; нужно 'other things' без артикля, так как речь о множественном числе в общем смысле. Совет: использовать 'other' + plural noun для обозначения прочих предметов.

× In my view, in my country bikes are no popular because all of my nationality go to work or another place only in car or a bus.

✓ In my view, bicycles are not popular in my country because most people go to work or elsewhere only by car or by bus.

Ошибка в числе и словоупотреблении: 'bikes' можно заменить на более формальное 'bicycles', но главное — фраза 'are no popular' неверна; правильная отрицательная форма — 'are not popular'. Также 'all of my nationality' некорректно — лучше 'most people' или 'people in my country'. 'In car' неверно, правильно 'by car'. Советы: использовать 'are not' для отрицания и предлог 'by' с видами транспорта.

× In my view, in my country bikes are no popular because all of my nationality go to work or another place only in car or a bus.

✓ In my view, bicycles are not popular in my country because most people go to work or elsewhere only by car or by bus.

Выражение 'all of my nationality' и 'another place' звучат неестественно; нужно использовать количественные слова 'most people' и наречие 'elsewhere'. Рекомендация: применять распространённые квантификаторы ('most', 'many') и подходящие слова ('elsewhere').

× But I rarely see a pupil with bike or I see it.

✓ But I rarely see a pupil with a bike, although sometimes I do.

Пропущён артикль 'a' перед 'bike' — 'a bike'. Также 'I rarely see a pupil with bike or I see it' неестественно; лучше использовать 'although sometimes I do' или 'occasionally I do'. Совет: использовать неопределённый артикль с исчисляемыми предметами в единственном числе и более естественные вводные конструкции.

× But I rarely see a pupil with bike or I see it.

✓ But I rarely see a pupil with a bike, although sometimes I do.

Ошибка предлога/артикля: корректная конструкция — 'see a pupil with a bike'. Также 'or I see it' неверное сочетание; заменить на 'although sometimes I do' для естественной речи.