自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct minor grammar, and give one or two specific supporting details (e.g., where you rode it or a memory). Keep it under five sentences and use linking words if adding details.

範例: Yes, I had an orange bike when I was about ten to twelve. I often rode it around my neighborhood with friends, and I remember learning to ride it on a small park path near my house.

建議: Make the answer more natural and use clearer reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors; use comparative forms correctly. Provide two specific reasons and a brief example to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, they are cheaper than motorcycles or cars, so many people choose them to save money. Secondly, they are healthier and many commuters cycle to work; for example, my neighbor cycles five kilometers to his office every day.

× Yes, I used to have a bike in orange colour when I was a kid, uh, when I was a 10 to 12 years old at that time.

✓ Yes, I used to have an orange bike when I was about 10 to 12 years old.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and article errors. 'in orange colour' is non-native; use 'an orange bike' (adjective before noun). 'a 10 to 12 years old' is incorrect because 'years old' follows a number without an article; use 'about 10 to 12 years old' or 'between 10 and 12 years old'. Also remove redundant phrases 'at that time' and filler 'uh'. The tense 'used to have' is correct for a past habit. Suggested improvement: Keep 'used to' for past habits, place adjectives before nouns, and use 'about' or 'between' for approximate ages.

× Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country because people usually use bike over motorcycles or motor vehicles because bikes are more cheap comparisonally and they they keep you healthy.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country because people usually use them instead of motorcycles or cars, because bikes are cheaper comparatively and they keep you healthy.

Multiple issues addressed that fall under preposition and related grammar types: 'use bike' requires an object pronoun or plural noun: 'use them' or 'use bikes'. 'use ... over motorcycles' is awkward; use 'use ... instead of motorcycles' for correct preposition. 'motor vehicles' is wordy; 'cars' is natural. 'more cheap comparisonally' is incorrect: use comparative adjective 'cheaper' and adverb 'comparatively' or 'in comparison'. Also duplicated word 'they they' should be single 'they'. Suggested improvement: Use correct object forms and prepositions ('instead of'), use comparative adjectives ('cheaper'), and avoid duplication and unnecessary words.