自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically correct, concise and clear. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word choice: use past tense for childhood, avoid repetitions and incorrect phrases (e.g., “which is which color is black,” “we used to buy cycling”).

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small black bike when I was a child, and I rode it around my neighborhood every day. For example, I would cycle to my friend’s house and to the local park, which helped me learn balance and independence.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, then support it with clearer reasons and a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like “because we do” and informal fillers (“So yeah”). Provide a specific example or statistic if possible to strengthen your answer.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars. Moreover, bicycles are cheap to maintain and convenient for short trips; for instance, many students and market sellers cycle daily to save money and avoid traffic.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about possession in the past ('when you were a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Change 'have' to 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past simple for past states (I had).

× When I was a child it was a small bike which is which color is black and we used to buy cycling around our whole area.

✓ When I was a child it was a small black bike and we used to cycle around our whole area.

This sentence has multiple problems: incorrect phrase 'which is which color is black' is redundant and ungrammatical, 'buy cycling' is incorrect collocation, and overall structure is awkward. Correct by using 'small black bike' (adjective order) and the verb 'cycle' for the activity. Keep past tense 'used to' for habitual past actions. Suggestion: simplify descriptions and use correct verb forms (adjective + noun, and 'cycle' not 'cycling' after 'used to').

× Yes, in my country bikes are popular because we do.

✓ Yes, in my country bikes are popular because we do use them a lot.

The original 'because we do' is incomplete and abrupt. Add the object 'use them a lot' to complete the idea; keep present simple 'are popular' for a general truth. Suggestion: complete clauses after 'because' to explain the reason clearly.

× There are a lot of people who cannot afford cars or other transport systems.

✓ There are a lot of people who cannot afford cars or other forms of transport.

'Transport systems' is not wrong but 'forms of transport' is more natural here. The sentence otherwise is grammatically correct. Suggestion: prefer 'forms of transport' or 'types of transport' for natural phrasing.

× So yeah, we use bikes.

✓ So yeah, we use bikes.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple describing a general habit. No change needed except punctuation or register. Explanation: use present simple for habitual or general facts.