自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words, avoid unnecessary filler like “That is my answer,” and correct tense and grammar (e.g., “a few years later I was still not very good” → clearer past-tense sequencing). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: I didn’t have a bike as a young child. My first bike came when I was 14, and a friend from another city taught me how to ride it. However, even a few years after learning, I wasn’t very confident cycling on busy streets.

建議: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore, moreover) and be precise about what you mean by “part of the public transport.” Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct repetition (don’t use “because” twice).

範例: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country. This is mainly because many roads are unsafe for cyclists, and in some cities bikes are used more as informal public transport rather than for recreation, so people prefer motorised vehicles instead.

× My first bike when I was 14 years old, my best friend from another city taught me how to ride a bike.

✓ My first bike was when I was 14 years old; my best friend from another city taught me how to ride a bike.

The original sentence is missing the past-tense verb 'was' to link 'My first bike' and the time phrase. Also the sentence is a run-on; inserting 'was' and separating clauses with a semicolon or period makes the past-time statement clear and grammatically correct. Suggestion: use 'was' after 'My first bike' and separate independent clauses with a period or semicolon. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× Few years later I'm still not very good at riding a bicycle.

✓ A few years later, I was still not very good at riding a bicycle.

The sentence mixes past time reference ('A few years later') with present tense 'I'm'. To keep tense consistent with the past narrative, use past tense 'was'. Also include the article 'A' before 'few years later' and a comma after the introductory phrase. Suggestion: match tense to the surrounding context and include appropriate articles and punctuation. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× No, I don't think that bikes are popular in my country because most of the roads are very unsafe for bicycles to ride around because bicycles are part of the public transport in my country.

✓ No, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because most roads are very unsafe for bicycles, and bicycles are not a common form of public transport here.

The original is wordy and contains redundancy and awkward plural phrasing. 'Most of the roads' is acceptable but 'most roads' is more natural. Also the clause 'unsafe for bicycles to ride around' is awkward; rephrase to 'unsafe for bicycles'. The final clause 'because bicycles are part of the public transport' contradicts the intended meaning; likely the student meant they are not used as public transport, so clarify. Suggestion: simplify and avoid repetition by removing duplicate 'because' and streamline plural nouns for natural usage. (Grammar problem type ID: 1)