自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce fillers (e.g., "uh"), make the structure clearer by starting with a direct topic sentence, and tighten supporting details. Use one linking phrase to show sequence (e.g., "so" or "then") and avoid small repetition. Keep within 3–4 sentences for clarity.

範例: I didn't have my own bike as a child because my family couldn't afford one. Instead, I learned to ride in the third grade by borrowing a friend's bike, and we practiced in a nearby field every afternoon because it felt safer than riding on the road.

建議: Avoid hesitations and unclear words like "UMM" and ensure sentences are grammatically correct and logical. Provide specific reasons and one clear linking phrase (e.g., "because," "so," "therefore"). Also correct awkward comparisons (use "cheaper than" not "cheaper rather than"). Keep to 2–3 concise sentences and give a clear example or statistic if possible.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are much cheaper than using petrol cars or frequent public transport. During the pandemic their use increased further, as many people cycled for exercise when gyms were closed and to avoid crowded buses and trains.

× I never had my own bike as a child because, uh, financially we weren't that stable.

✓ I never had my own bike as a child because, financially we weren't that stable.

No plural/singular error here; sentence is fine. Removed filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: keep sentence concise and maintain singular 'bike' since it's correct.

× But I learned how to ride a bike when I was in the third grade by borrowing my friend's bike.

✓ But I learned how to ride a bike in third grade by borrowing my friend's bike.

No present participle error; sentence is correct. Adjusted prepositional phrase 'in third grade' for natural English. Suggestion: use 'in third grade' rather than 'when I was in the third grade' for brevity.

× We would every afternoon we would go to the field and practice riding the bike there because it is safer than riding.

✓ Every afternoon we would go to the field and practice riding the bike there because it was safer than riding on the road.

Original sentence is repetitive and has a structure problem: 'We would every afternoon we would' repeats the subject and modal. Removed the redundancy and matched past-tense 'was' with 'would' habitual past. Also clarified comparison object by adding 'on the road' to complete the idea. Suggestion: avoid repeating subject+modal and make comparisons explicit.

× Bikes are popular in my country because aside from being UMM convenient, they are cheaper rather than paying for gas and riding public transport.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country because, aside from being more convenient, they are cheaper than paying for gas or using public transport.

Errors: 'UMM' filler should be removed; comparative form needed 'more convenient' and comparative conjunction should be 'cheaper than' not 'cheaper rather than'. Also use 'or using public transport' to list alternatives. Suggestion: use correct comparative forms and 'cheaper than' when comparing two things.

× UMM bikes became more popular during the pandemic because not everyone can go to the gym due to the restrictions in UMM being face to face with each other.

✓ Bikes became more popular during the pandemic because not everyone could go to the gym due to restrictions on face-to-face activities.

Multiple issues: remove filler 'UMM'; tense should be past 'could' to match 'became'; phrase 'restrictions in UMM being face to face with each other' is ungrammatical and unclear. Rewrote as 'restrictions on face-to-face activities' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: match past tense events consistently and use clear noun phrases for 'restrictions'.

× So UMM bikes.

✓ So people turned to bikes.

Fragment: 'So UMM bikes.' is not a complete sentence and contains filler. Replaced with a full sentence that connects to previous idea. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; ensure subject and verb are present.