自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetitions and grammar mistakes (e.g., tense, articles, word order). Keep to 2–4 sentences and mention a clear reason and a short outcome.

範例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child; my parents bought it for my older sister but I used it a lot. However, it eventually became impractical for my work, so I stored it away and rarely use it now.

建議: Answer directly, then support with clear, specific reasons and examples. Use correct vocabulary (bikes, bicycles) and avoid hesitations and filler phrases. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and keep to 2–3 concise sentences. Mention who uses motorbikes/cars and give one example of when bicycles are used.

範例: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes or cars for commuting because they are faster and more convenient; bicycles are mainly used for leisure events or community cycling campaigns on weekends.

× Currently I don't have any bikes actually, but in the past I used to have one and that might was actually a gift for my elder sister and it was really valuable thing so but now I didn't use that anymore because it doesn't serve my job as well as my life so I just left it at my storage.

✓ Currently I don't have any bikes, but in the past I used to have one; it was actually a gift from my elder sister and it was a really valuable thing. However, I don't use it anymore because it doesn't suit my job or my life, so I left it in storage.

Multiple errors: article errors (ID 22) — 'a really valuable thing' needs the article 'a' before 'really' is okay but 'valuable thing' is awkward; better 'a really valuable item' or keep 'a really valuable thing'. 'at my storage' uses incorrect preposition (ID 11) — correct is 'in storage' or 'in my storage'. Pronoun/verb tense issues: 'that might was actually a gift' mixes modal and past tense incorrectly (ID 5 and 4) — correct is 'it was actually a gift' or 'it might have been a gift' but context implies certainty so 'it was a gift'. 'now I didn't use that anymore' is wrong tense and auxiliary (ID 5 and 6) — should be present 'I don't use it anymore'. Also subject-verb agreement and sentence structure issues (ID 26 and 27) — long run-on sentence should be split into clearer sentences. Suggestions: break into shorter sentences, use 'a gift from my elder sister', use 'I don't use it anymore', and 'left it in storage'.

× I don't think buys are really popular in our own country.

✓ I don't think bikes are really popular in our country.

Singular/plural and word choice issue (ID 1): 'buys' is a misspelling of 'bikes'. Also 'our own country' is wordy; 'our country' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct noun spelling 'bikes' and prefer 'our country'.

× In fact, we continue to work by using our own motorbikes or just our own cars to go to workplace.

✓ In fact, we usually travel to work using our motorbikes or cars.

Pronoun and article issues (ID 12 and 22): 'our own' is redundant; 'our motorbikes or cars' is sufficient. Preposition and article errors (ID 11 and 22): 'go to workplace' should be 'travel to work' or 'go to the workplace' depending on meaning. Also sentence word order is awkward. Suggestion: simplify to 'travel to work using our motorbikes or cars'.

× Like I mean, in special occasions, we tend to use buying to have, you know, a campaign for bikes as well as, you know, just having a small talks, uh, during biking to any.

✓ I mean, on special occasions we tend to organize bike campaigns and have small talks while riding together.

Multiple errors: verb usage and word choice (ID 4 and 8) — 'use buying to have a campaign' is incorrect; 'organize bike campaigns' is correct. Article and noun errors (ID 22 and 1) — 'a small talks' should be 'small talks' or 'a small talk' but 'have small talks' or better 'chat'. Preposition and sentence structure errors (ID 11 and 26) — 'during biking to any' is ungrammatical; use 'while riding together' or 'while biking'. Suggestions: use 'organize', 'bike campaigns', and 'have small talks while riding together' for clarity.