自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and grammatical by using complete sentences, adding a clear topic sentence, and including one brief supporting detail. Use linking words or punctuation to connect ideas and avoid run-on sentences. Also keep it concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences).

範例: Yes. My father bought me a black bike when I was a child. It was very cool and I used to ride it everywhere, especially around my neighborhood after school.

建議: Clarify vocabulary and grammar, and make the reason clearer and more specific. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Avoid unclear phrases like "communicating by bike" and fix grammatical errors (e.g., "in load heavy traffic").

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and practical. For example, many students and office workers ride bikes to avoid traffic jams and save money on transport.

× Yes, my father bought me a bike it is a black and cool bike I can ride it everywhere.

✓ Yes, my father bought me a bike. It is a cool black bike that I could ride anywhere.

The original is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and connectors, causing sentence structure errors (ID 26). Also word order for adjectives and tense consistency needed adjustment: use two sentences or proper conjunctions; place adjectives in conventional order ('cool black' or 'black and cool' but 'cool black' is more natural), and since the question asks about childhood, maintain past ability 'could ride' or keep present 'could ride' to match 'when you were a child'. Suggestion: split into sentences or use relative clause and use past-tense modal for ability in childhood.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our country. You can see students and office workers communicating by bike because they are cheap and convenient in load heavy traffic.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country. You can see students and office workers commuting by bike because they are cheap and convenient in heavy traffic.

Two issues: verb choice and preposition/order. 'Communicating by bike' is incorrect — the intended verb is 'commuting' (traveling to work/school). 'In load heavy traffic' has wrong word order and wrong word 'load'; correct phrase is 'in heavy traffic'. This falls under incorrect use of prepositions and word order (ID 11 and ID 18), but per instructions we only label one type, so use ID 11. Suggestion: replace 'communicating' with 'commuting' and use 'in heavy traffic'.