自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer grammatically correct and more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “was one of my biggest hobbies” and “I used to cycle a lot” convey the same idea).

範例: Yes — I had several bikes when I was a child. For example, my first bike was a small red one, and later I got a mountain-style bike that I often rode with my family on weekend trips, which helped me stay active and enjoy outdoors.

建議: Make the statement more concise and use clearer linking language. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “cycling tracks on the roads” and avoid repeating “also”). Give a specific example or comparison to strengthen your answer.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many cities now have dedicated cycling lanes. For instance, in my city there are long bike paths along the river, so lots of commuters and hobby cyclists use them, especially at weekends.

× Yes, I own multiple bikes before and cycling was one of my biggest hobbies when I was small and I used to cycle a lot with my family.

✓ Yes, I owned multiple bikes before, and cycling was one of my biggest hobbies when I was young; I used to cycle a lot with my family.

The student used the present tense 'own' with the time marker 'before', which requires past tense. Change 'own' to 'owned' to match the past timeframe. Also 'when I was small' is informal; 'when I was young' or 'as a child' is more natural. Add a comma and a coordinating conjunction or a semicolon to connect related clauses properly. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for events in childhood and use punctuation to separate ideas. Grammar problem type and ID: Past tense issue (5).

× Yes, I think they are popular because there are a lot of cycling tracks in the roads in our city and also many people that I know also ride bicycles as one of their hobbies.

✓ Yes, I think they are popular because there are a lot of cycling tracks on the roads in our city, and many people I know also ride bicycles as a hobby.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'roads' (not 'in the roads'). The phrase 'many people that I know also' is wordy and contains an unnecessary 'also'; better is 'many people I know also' or 'many people I know'. Remove redundancy by keeping a single 'also'. Change 'as one of their hobbies' to the simpler 'as a hobby' or 'as one of their hobbies' if you want to emphasize multiple hobbies, but 'as a hobby' is more concise. This fixes preposition use and improves word order and concision. Grammar problem type and ID: Incorrect use of prepositions (11).