自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (word order and tense) and avoid redundancy. For example, say you were afraid because you saw accidents, mention whether that fear changed or not, and keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I was afraid of riding because I often saw other children fall and hurt themselves, so I avoided it. As a result, my parents didn’t buy me one since they knew I was scared.

建議: Make the answer more precise and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to connect reasons and add one specific example or brief comparison. Use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., commute, errands, leisure) and correct minor grammar ("much popular" -> "very popular"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many children enjoy them for play, and adults often use them for short commutes or running local errands. For instance, I often see people cycling to the market or school instead of driving.

× I actually never had a bike when as a child I could see other children getting hurt when they are riding their bikes.

✓ I actually never had a bike when I was a child because I could see other children getting hurt while they were riding their bikes.

The original sentence misuses the preposition/word order 'when as a child'. The correct temporal phrase is 'when I was a child' or 'as a child'. Also 'when they are riding' mixes present tense with a past context; use past progressive 'while they were riding' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: choose one temporal expression ('when I was a child' or 'as a child') and keep verb tenses consistent (past simple/progressive).

× So it gave me a sense of fear that I should never try this and my parents never bought me a bike because they knew I was afraid of the hurting part.

✓ So it gave me a sense of fear that I should never try it, and my parents never bought me a bike because they knew I was afraid of getting hurt.

'This' is imprecise here; 'it' or 'it' referring to riding is clearer. 'The hurting part' is an unnatural noun phrase; use the gerund phrase 'getting hurt' to describe the action/experience. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Suggestion: use clear pronouns ('it') and natural gerund phrases ('getting hurt').

× I think bikes are popular in our country because a lot of children love bikes and adults usually use them for short trips or for running errands that are nearby.

✓ I think bikes are popular in our country because a lot of children love bikes, and adults usually use them for short trips or for running nearby errands.

The original sentence is mostly correct but the phrase 'running errands that are nearby' is awkward in word order. Reordering to 'running nearby errands' or better 'running errands nearby' makes it more natural. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Suggestion: prefer natural adjective/adverb placement ('errands nearby') and use commas to separate independent clauses.

× So I think they are much popular in our country.

✓ So I think they are very popular in our country.

'Much' is not used before adjectives like 'popular' in positive statements; use 'very' or 'quite'. 'They are' refers to bikes (plural) which is fine. Suggestion: use 'very popular' or 'quite popular' instead of 'much popular'.