自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear. Start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Remove hesitation words and correct word order. Use linking words if you add reasons or details. For example, say who bought it, what kind it was and a short memory or reason why you liked it.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought a small red bicycle for me when I was seven, and I rode it every day after school. Because it was easy to handle, I quickly learned to ride without training wheels and used it to visit friends in the neighborhood.

建議: Answer directly and organize your ideas. Begin with a clear opinion (yes/no/partly), then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (however, although, because, so) and correct articles and word order. Avoid repeating phrases and filler words.

範例: I think bikes are moderately popular in my country. Although many people own bicycles for short trips and markets, cars and motorcycles are more common for daily commuting, so bikes are mainly used in smaller towns and by students. For example, in my city you see many bicycles near schools but few on busy main roads because traffic is heavy.

× I had like, uh, which means my father bought for special me special for me.

✓ I had one when I was a child; my father bought it for me as a special gift.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear (sentence structure errors). It contains filler words ('like, uh'), a misplaced clause ('which means'), and incorrect word order ('for special me special for me'). Correcting requires removing fillers, supplying a clear subject ('one' referring to a bike), and using a proper relative or coordinating structure. Suggestion: say 'I had one when I was a child' and then add the reason 'my father bought it for me as a special gift.' Use pronoun 'it' to refer to the bike and proper noun phrase order 'a special gift.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× I can't say bikes are popular in my country, although the there are a lot of bikes in our country in the street but also the people want to have to bike.

✓ I can't say that bikes are popular in my country. Although there are a lot of bikes on the streets, people don't necessarily want to own a bike.

This sentence has multiple issues but most notably incorrect article and preposition use and sentence structure leading to confusion. Problems fixed: add conjunction 'that' after 'say' for clarity; remove the extra definite article 'the' before 'there'; use the plural noun 'streets' with preposition 'on' instead of 'in the street'; correct the awkward phrase 'want to have to bike' to 'don't necessarily want to own a bike.' Suggestions: split into two sentences for clarity, use 'on the streets' for location, and use 'own a bike' to express possession. Use negative/modal construction 'don't necessarily' if implying reluctance. Grammar problem type ID:22