自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized. Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I had a bike), then add 1–2 specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetitions and filler words. Focus on clear reasons why you might buy a new one (condition, rust, dust) and keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, it fell into disrepair because I left it in the yard for years, so it became rusty and covered in dust. For that reason, I'm thinking of buying a new one.

建議: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and a brief future prediction using linking words. Avoid repeating words and use more precise vocabulary (climate, infrastructure, urban planning). Limit to 2–3 sentences and connect ideas with words like 'because' and 'however'.

範例: At present, cycling is not very popular in Saudi Arabia because the hot climate and limited cycling infrastructure make it uncomfortable and unsafe. However, the government’s Vision initiatives could change this if they invest in dedicated bike lanes and shaded routes.

× Yes, I really had a bike when I was a child and and I'm thinking to buy a new one because my old one fell apart and it got dusty with the humidity and the sun went because I've I left it like I left it in the yard for years so it's got dusty.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I'm thinking of buying a new one because my old one fell apart and became dusty from humidity and sun exposure; I left it in the yard for years.

Multiple issues: repetition ('and and') and incorrect verb patterns ('thinking to buy' should be 'thinking of buying' — modal/verb + -ing form), past participle/past simple misuse ('got dusty' is colloquial; 'became dusty' is clearer), unnecessary words and poor sentence structure. Suggestion: remove duplicate word, use 'thinking of buying' for intention, use 'became dusty' or 'was dusty' for state, and break into clearer clauses or use punctuation to join ideas. Grammar problem types applicable: 8 Verb + -ing form, 26 Sentence structure errors.

× I can't say it's popular at the moment because of the weather in Saudi Arabia in general.

✓ I can't say that bikes are popular at the moment because of the weather in Saudi Arabia.

Original omits the explicit subject 'bikes' causing ambiguity and slightly incorrect reference with 'it's'. 'It's popular' refers to a singular; 'bikes are popular' matches plural subject. Also removing 'in general' at end improves clarity. Suggestion: name the subject (bikes) and use plural verb agreement. Grammar problem types applicable: 1 Singular and plural issue, 27 Subject-verb agreement errors.

× We don't like, we don't ride bikes usually, but maybe in the future with the vision they may improve bike lanes.

✓ We don't usually ride bikes, but maybe in the future, with Vision 2030, they will improve bike lanes.

Adverb 'usually' should come before the main verb: 'don't usually ride'. Also 'they may improve' is possible but 'they will improve' is more natural when predicting future plans; 'Vision' should be capitalized if referring to a named plan and include a year for clarity (optional). Suggestion: place adverbs before main verbs, choose appropriate modal for the level of certainty, and clarify proper nouns. Grammar problem types applicable: 20 Incorrect adverb placement, 7 Future tense issue, 26 Sentence structure errors.