自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural and directly responds to the question with clear details (gift, age, emotions). To improve further: make the response more concise by combining short sentences, add one specific detail about using the bike (e.g., where you rode it or how often), and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep the answer under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike: my father gave it to me when I was seven, and I was thrilled. I used to ride it every afternoon around my neighbourhood, which helped me become more confident and independent.

建議: Your answer addresses the question and gives general observations, but it is wordy and has grammatical issues and repetition. To improve: use a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating words (e.g., 'mostly' twice), use linking words (however, although, and) to contrast groups, and add one specific example or statistic if possible. Also correct grammar (e.g., 'is ridden' -> 'are ridden' or better: 'people ride bikes').

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Although they are particularly common among teenagers, many older people also ride them for regular exercise and short trips, for example, pensioners who cycle in parks every morning.

× My father gifted me that bike when I was seven years old.

✓ My father gave me that bike when I was seven years old.

'Gifted' as a verb is correct but less common in simple past for this context; however the sentence is acceptable. Prefer 'gave' as the simple past of 'give' for natural spoken English. No tense mismatch; suggestion improves register and naturalness.

× I was very excited when I first received it and I was very happy.

✓ I was very excited when I first received it and very happy.

The sentence is grammatically correct but repetitive with two 'I was'. Removing the second subject improves fluency while keeping past tense consistent.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our country, even though it is mostly ridden by young boys who are mostly teenagers, but even some old people also ride bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country; although they are mostly ridden by young boys and teenagers, some older people also ride bikes.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference. 'Bikes' is plural so use 'they are' not 'it is'. 'Ride bike' needs plural 'ride bikes'. 'Old people' should be 'older people'. Also sentence structure improved by replacing 'even though... but' with 'although' and rephrasing for clarity.

× The old people who ride bike, they mostly ride because to maintain physically exercise.

✓ Older people who ride bikes mostly do so to maintain physical fitness.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'ride because to maintain physically exercise' is ungrammatical. Use 'do so to' + verb and 'maintain physical fitness' or 'keep fit'. Also 'physically' is an adverb; 'physical' adjective needed before 'fitness'. Plural 'bikes' required and remove redundant subject 'they'.