自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, grammatically correct and add one or two specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use a linking word to add detail. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and tense errors (use past tense for childhood).

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child because my parents bought one for me. For example, I used to ride it to the local park every afternoon, which helped me learn balance and made me feel independent.

建議: Answer directly, then give a clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words (because, for example, also) and avoid repetition. Complete the sentence with a clear conclusion or result.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, in my city lots of adults ride bicycles to work or the market, so traffic is often less congested in residential areas.

× Yes, I had a bike when was I, uh, when I was a child, uh, that, uh, my parents bought for me and I ride a bicycle, uh, into the road and I ride and ride by bicycle and go to.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child that my parents bought for me, and I used to ride it on the road.

The sentence has multiple structure problems (ID 26). The clause 'when was I' uses incorrect word order for a statement; the relative clause 'that my parents bought for me' should directly modify 'a bike'; verb tenses are inconsistent: 'had' (past) should pair with past habitual 'used to ride' rather than present 'I ride'. Redundant phrases like 'ride and ride by bicycle and go to' are unclear and must be simplified. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past habits (e.g., 'used to ride'), place subordinate clauses in correct order (subject before verb), and remove fillers and repetition.

× Yes, I think bikes bikes are popular in my country because in my city adults or people on ride a bicycle to go out and it is

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country because in my city many adults ride bicycles to get around.

This sentence contains redundancy ('bikes bikes') and poor sentence structure (ID 26). 'Adults or people on ride a bicycle' is ungrammatical; 'on' is incorrect and the phrase should be 'adults ride bicycles'. The ending 'and it is' is incomplete. Also prefer 'bicycles' or 'bikes' (avoid repeating). Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use a clear subject-verb phrase 'adults ride bicycles', and complete the idea (e.g., 'to get around' or 'to go out').