自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use passive/active correctly), avoid fillers, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, state who gave the bike, when, and one memory or feeling about it.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and I remember being very surprised and excited. After I got it, I used to ride around the neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me make friends and feel more independent.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, remove irrelevant words, use linking words to add specific reasons or examples, and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement). Keep to 2–3 supporting sentences. Mention who uses bikes and why they are popular or where they are used.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many cities have dedicated bike paths, and school children often ride to school because it is cheap and convenient. Also, some people prefer cycling for short commutes to avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child uh, it gifted from my dad when there was a my birthday, So it was a big surprise to me at that time. So I.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my dad on my birthday, so it was a big surprise to me at the time.

Multiple past-tense constructions are needed and some verbs are missing. The clause 'it gifted from my dad' lacks the auxiliary and passive form; the correct past passive is 'It was a gift from my dad.' 'When there was a my birthday' is incorrect preposition and article use; use 'on my birthday.' Also split run-on with periods and remove the trailing unfinished phrase. Suggestion: use past simple and passive where appropriate, and check prepositions and articles: 'on my birthday' and 'it was a gift.'

× Yes, my car. In my country bikes are very popular, so there is a bike path is also there and some school children using bicycles for their day-to-day activities as.

✓ Yes. In my country, bikes are very popular. There are bike paths, and some schoolchildren use bicycles for their day-to-day activities.

This response has sentence fragments, incorrect repetition, and wrong verb forms. 'Yes, my car.' is irrelevant and likely a fragment; remove or replace. 'so there is a bike path is also there' repeats 'is' and mismatches singular/plural; 'There are bike paths' matches plural 'bikes' and common infrastructure. 'some school children using bicycles' lacks a finite verb; change to 'some schoolchildren use bicycles.' Also 'schoolchildren' is one word. Suggestions: remove fragments, ensure each clause has a subject and finite verb, match singular/plural, and place commas after introductory phrases.