自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, grammatical and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details (when, who, how) using linking words. Avoid filler words and correct verb forms (e.g., 'I got', 'my first time riding').

範例: Yes, I did. I got a bike when I was in primary school as a present for my sister, and I remember the first time I tried to ride it one evening with my father helping me. After a few tries, I could balance and ride a short distance on my own.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with two specific reasons, using linking words (for example, because, so, and). Use accurate phrases (e.g., 'convenient form of transport', 'short trips', 'more affordable'). Keep sentences short and grammatical.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular. For example, many people use them for short trips because they are a convenient and cheap form of transport, and recently electric bikes have become more common because they are affordable and save time in traffic.

× Yeah, umm, I think I get the bike.

✓ Yeah, umm, I think I got the bike.

The question asks about having a bike when you were a child (past). 'Get' is present tense; use the simple past 'got' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when talking about past events (e.g., 'I got', 'I had').

× One night was in primary school, that was my first time trying to riding a bike, and the bike is, uh, a present for my sister.

✓ One night when I was in primary school, that was my first time trying to ride a bike, and the bike was a present for my sister.

Multiple errors: time reference requires past tense 'was' with a subject ('I was in primary school'); 'trying to riding' incorrectly combines 'to' with a gerund — use base form after 'to' ('to ride'); 'is' should be past 'was' to match past context. Suggestion: use 'when I was' for time clauses, use 'trying to' + base verb, and keep tense consistent.

× Yes, definitely quite as a really or convenience transportation for people like riding a place really nearby to nearby together and from now people are preferring more cheaper

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are a convenient form of transportation for short trips, and nowadays people prefer cheaper options.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains awkward word order and incorrect word forms. Problems include noun/adjective choice ('convenient' instead of 'convenience' when modifying 'form'), incorrect comparative 'more cheaper' (redundant), and unclear phrases ('riding a place really nearby to nearby together'). Also tense/usage: 'from now' should be 'nowadays' and 'are preferring' is unnecessary progressive; use simple present 'prefer' for general statements. Suggestion: simplify the sentence, use 'convenient', 'short trips' to express nearby travel, use 'nowadays' and 'prefer'.