自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct small grammar mistakes; use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions, and add one specific detail or short example. Also correct tense/number agreement and use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “because,” “which,” “so”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, and it was a big part of my childhood. My friends and I often raced around the neighborhood, which helped us become closer because we spent hours playing together after school. Those races are one of my fondest memories.

建議: Start with a direct answer (Yes/No) and then give a clear reason with correct grammar and specific examples. Fix subject-verb agreement and unclear phrases like “not technically.” Use linking words (e.g., “however,” “because,” “for example”) and keep the response to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Not really — bikes are not very popular nationwide. However, in my neighborhood they were common because many families were relatively well-off and children shared bikes, so we often played together after school with each other's bikes.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it used to be the most important part of my childhood.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and it was the most important part of my childhood.

The phrase 'used to be' implies a habitual action in the past rather than a simple past state. Here the student refers to a past state (the bike being important), so the simple past 'was' is more appropriate. Suggestion: use 'was' for a past state rather than 'used to be.'

× Most of my friends and I bonded over our racing competition with the other neighborhood children, neighbors children sorry.

✓ Most of my friends and I bonded over our racing competitions with the other neighborhood children.

The phrase 'neighbors children' is incorrect; the correct form is 'neighborhood children' or 'neighbors' children.' Also 'racing competition' is countable and likely plural when speaking generally, so 'racing competitions' fits. Suggestion: use the correct noun phrase 'neighborhood children' and make 'competition' plural when referring to repeated events.

× And that's kind of made us more closer in some ways.

✓ And that kind of made us closer in some ways.

The contraction 'that's kind of' (that has/kind of) is incorrect here. 'That kind of made us closer' or 'And that made us closer' is correct. Also 'more closer' is a redundancy ('closer' already expresses comparison), so use 'closer' alone. Suggestion: remove 'more' before 'closer' and use 'that' rather than 'that's' in this context.

× Not technically in my country, but in my surrounding or my neighborhood, bikes used to be more common since most of the people living there is well paid and in my community, we had the sense of sharing so we used to play together after school with each other's bike.

✓ Not technically in my country, but in my neighborhood, bikes used to be more common because most of the people living there were well paid. In my community we had a sense of sharing, so we used to play together after school with each other's bikes.

Multiple issues: 'surrounding' is incorrect; use 'neighborhood.' 'Most of the people living there is well paid' has subject-verb agreement and tense errors: 'people' requires 'were' (past) not 'is.' 'Each other's bike' should be plural 'each other's bikes' because each child had their own bike. Also run-on sentence should be split for clarity. Suggestion: use 'were' for plural past, 'neighborhood' for location, and pluralize 'bikes.'

× Most of the people living there is well paid and in my community, we had the sense of sharing so we used to play together after school with each other's bike.

✓ Most of the people living there were well paid, and in my community we had a sense of sharing, so we used to play together after school with each other's bikes.

The verb 'is' does not agree with the plural subject 'people.' In past description, use 'were.' Also 'each other's bike' should be 'each other's bikes' to match plural ownership. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject number and match possessed noun number to owners.