自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is slightly long and could be better structured with a concise topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Add a linking word to connect the main idea and the reason, and replace vague phrases like “basically walked” with more precise wording. Keep the response to no more than 4–5 sentences.

範例: Yes — I had a bike as a child, but I rarely used it because I was afraid of traffic. Therefore, I usually walked or my parents drove me to places nearby. For example, I walked to school most days, and my parents would drive me if we had errands to run.

建議: Good direct answer and relevant supporting details. To improve, add a linking phrase to show contrast or emphasis, include a specific example or statistic to make it more concrete, and avoid minor grammar errors (e.g., “don't have own cars” → “don't own cars”). Keep answers concise and natural.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Japan, especially in cities like Tokyo. In fact, many urban residents don’t own cars, so they often cycle to work or to grocery stores. For example, near my apartment there are dozens of parked bikes outside the train station every morning.

× Yes I did, but I hardly used it because I was too afraid of traffic so I basically walked or my parents gave me a ride to the destination when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I did, but I hardly used it because I was too afraid of traffic, so I usually walked or my parents gave me a ride to my destination when I was a kid.

Run-on and word choice: The sentence lacks commas to separate clauses and uses 'basically' awkwardly. 'Usually' is a better adverb to express habitual action in the past. Also 'to the destination' is unnatural; use 'to my destination'. Add commas after 'Yes' and before 'so' to clarify clause boundaries.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in Japan, especially in cities like Tokyo. Many people don't have own cars, so they use bikes to go to work or to grocery stores.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in Japan, especially in cities like Tokyo. Many people don't have their own cars, so they use bikes to go to work or to grocery stores.

Possessive pronoun missing: 'own cars' requires a possessive determiner such as 'their' to indicate whose cars. Add 'their' to form the correct phrase 'their own cars'.