自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify the main idea with a simple topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise details. Start by directly answering (Yes/No), then give one or two short supporting details (whose bike it was, color, when you used it). Use correct word order and articles, and avoid unrelated words. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a pink bicycle when I was a child. It was a small bike with training wheels that my parents bought for me when I was six. I used it every weekend to ride around the neighborhood with my friends, and I remember practicing until I could ride without the training wheels.

建議: Begin with a clear direct answer (Yes/No) and then give specific reasons and examples. Remove unrelated words like “Chores.” Use linking words (for example, because, and, also) to connect ideas. Be specific about contexts when people use bikes (commuting, leisure, exercise) and keep responses concise (1–3 sentences).

範例: Yes, bicycles are fairly popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and leisure. For example, young people often ride bikes when they hang out with friends or go on picnics, and some people also cycle to work to save money and get some exercise.

× As a watch show I have the pink one that a bicycle.

✓ As the watch shows, I had a pink bicycle.

The student used incorrect words and word order. 'As a watch show' should be 'As the watch shows' (definite article and third-person singular verb form), and because the examiner asked about childhood ('when you were a child'), the past tense 'had' is appropriate instead of 'have'. 'One that a bicycle' is ungrammatical; replace with 'a pink bicycle'. Suggestion: use the correct article 'the', use the simple past 'had' for past situations, and place adjectives before nouns ('pink bicycle').

× Chores. I think bicycles are popular in my country but in the way of we ride when we hang out with friends and sometimes when we go out to picnic.

✓ I think bicycles are popular in my country, but we mainly ride them when we hang out with friends or go on picnics.

The original has an unrelated word 'Chores' and awkward structure 'in the way of we ride'. Remove the stray word. Use 'mainly' to express frequency and 'ride them' to refer back to bicycles (correct pronoun use). Use parallel structure 'hang out with friends or go on picnics' and change 'go out to picnic' to 'go on picnics'. Suggestion: avoid stray words, use clear connectors, use pronouns correctly to refer to antecedents, and use standard phrases like 'go on picnics'.