自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and smoother linking words (e.g., "however", "but", "as I grew up"). Avoid contradictions like "Yes I did, but I hadn't." Improve grammar: say "I didn't have confidence in riding a bike" or "I couldn't ride a bike at first."

範例: I didn’t have a bike when I was very young, so I usually walked instead. However, as I grew up I learned to ride and gained confidence, and now I enjoy cycling regularly and consider my bike one of my favorite possessions.

建議: Answer directly, then support with specific details and a linking word to contrast groups. Use plural/singular and articles correctly (e.g., "young people" not "the young people"). Give a brief reason or example to make your point more convincing.

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are popular, especially among young people who use them for short trips and exercise. However, many adults prefer trains for commuting because the rail system is fast and convenient in my city.

× Yes I did, but I hadn't.

✓ Yes, I did, but I didn't.

The student intended to contrast having a bike in the past with not actually owning one; 'hadn't' is a contraction of 'had not' which typically pairs with past perfect and needs a reference point. Here simple past negative 'didn't' matches 'Yes, I did' and is consistent. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× I didn't have confidence about riding bikes.

✓ I didn't have confidence in riding a bike.

The correct preposition with 'confidence' is 'in' rather than 'about'. Also use singular 'a bike' for general activity or 'bikes' could be used but singular fits the context. This keeps the sentence idiomatic.

× So I prefer it to walk rather than riding bike.

✓ So I preferred to walk rather than ride a bike.

The context is past habits (childhood), so use past tense 'preferred'. When comparing actions, use the base verb 'ride' after 'rather than'. Include the article 'a' before 'bike'. Remove the extraneous 'it' which is not needed.

× But with growing up I like to riding bike and now the bike is my best friend.

✓ But as I grew up I learned to ride a bike, and now my bike is my best friend.

This sentence mixes tenses and incorrect verb forms. Use past 'as I grew up' and the correct infinitive 'learned to ride' (not 'like to riding'). Also use 'my bike' for possession. The revised version keeps logical time sequence and correct verb forms.

× Yes, I do particularly bikes are very popular among the young people, but the adult people tend to use train rather than the bike because in my country train is very convenient and useful

✓ Yes, I do. In particular, bikes are very popular among young people, but adults tend to use trains rather than bikes because trains are very convenient and useful in my country.

The original has punctuation and word-order problems and incorrect adjective/adverb placement. 'Particularly' should be 'In particular' or placed properly. Use 'young people' without 'the', 'adults' instead of 'the adult people', plural 'trains' and 'bikes' for general statements, and add 'in my country' at the end for clarity. Split into two sentences for readability and correct punctuation.