自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (past tense and articles), simplify and make the answer concise, add a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep under five sentences. For example, say you didn’t own a bike but rented one occasionally, mention where you rented and who you rode with, and how often.

範例: I didn’t have my own bike as a child, but I often rented one from a nearby park to ride with my friends. For example, every weekend we would rent bikes from the park kiosk and cycle around the lake for an hour.

建議: Make a clear direct response, use correct tense and linking words, and give a specific reason or example. Keep it concise and organized: state your opinion, then add one reason and a concrete example. Use vocabulary relevant to shared/rental bikes and trends.

範例: A few years ago bikes were not very popular, especially during the pandemic, but they have become more common recently. This is because many app-based rental bikes now appear around cities; for instance, I often see dozens parked near the subway station and people use them for short trips.

× I never have a bike when I were child, but I did go to some parts that can rent a bike to have these this time to play with my friends and riding a bike to go around with

✓ I never had a bike when I was a child, but I did go to some places where you could rent a bike to play with my friends and ride a bike to go around.

Errors: incorrect tense use ('never have' should be past 'never had' because question asks about the past), wrong verb 'were' instead of 'was' with singular 'I', awkward noun choice 'parts' should be 'places', incorrect relative clause and modal form 'that can rent' should be 'where you could rent' to indicate ability in the past, redundant and incorrect phrase 'to have these this time', and inconsistent verb forms 'riding a bike' should be parallel 'ride a bike'. Suggestions: Use past simple for past events (had, was, could), use 'places' for locations, use 'where' for locations offering an action, and keep verb forms parallel in a list.

× few years ago probably not especially during the pandemic, but recently it's more popular than like a few years ago because more and more bikes that can rent randomly like many bike parked outside for rank on the app.

✓ A few years ago, probably not, especially during the pandemic, but recently bikes have become more popular than a few years ago because there are more and more rentable bikes parked outside and available to find on apps.

Errors: missing article 'A' at start, tense and aspect issues ('recently it's more popular' better as 'bikes have become more popular' to show change), awkward noun phrase 'bikes that can rent' should be 'rentable bikes' or 'bikes available to rent', incorrect word order 'many bike parked' should be 'many bikes parked', and unclear phrase 'for rank on the app' likely meant 'available to find on the app'. Suggestions: Add articles where needed, use present perfect to describe a recent change, use correct adjectives ('rentable') or structures ('available to rent'), ensure noun plurality matches verbs, and use clear phrasing for app availability.