自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I did.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary fillers. For example, correct tense: use past tense consistently (“I had a small bike”) and improve sentence variety by linking reasons with “because” or “so”.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle because my mother wanted me to learn how to ride, and I practiced in the park near our home. As a result, I became confident riding on my own by the time I was seven.

建議: Give a clearer opinion first, then provide specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”, “however”). Avoid filler words and unfinished phrases. Use vocabulary accurately (e.g., “bike lanes”, “urban planning”, “residential areas”) and complete your thoughts. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in Hong Kong because many new housing areas include bike lanes and shared cycle paths. For example, in my neighbourhood the local council recently added a dedicated cycling route that many people use for short commutes.

× Yes, I have a bike and when I was a child, when I was a kid. So because my mom want me to learn how to ride a bicycle. So I do have my bike when I was young and it was a very tiny size.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because my mom wanted me to learn how to ride a bicycle. I had a very small bike.

Problems: subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. The question asks about the past (Did you have...), so responses should use past tense. 'I have a bike' is present; change to 'I had a bike'. 'My mom want' uses incorrect verb form for third person singular and wrong tense: use past 'wanted'. 'I do have my bike when I was young' mixes present auxiliary 'do' with past time: use simple past 'I had'. Also 'a very tiny size' is unnatural; use 'a very small bike'. Suggestion: keep verbs in simple past to match the question and use correct third-person singular/past forms (wanted, had).

× I think yes, because in Hong Kong we have, umm, we have some row for bike. So especially I live in tranquilo. So mostly they're new the, the society with new urban planning would include, uh, the.

✓ Yes, I think so. In Hong Kong we have some bike lanes. Especially where I live in Tranquilo, new urban planning usually includes them.

Problems: incorrect prepositions and unclear sentence structure. 'We have some row for bike' is incorrect word choice and preposition; the natural term is 'bike lanes'. 'I live in tranquilo' needs capitalization and likely 'in Tranquilo' as a place. The original had fragmented and duplicated words ('they're new the, the'); rewrite into coherent past/present structure: 'new urban planning usually includes them'. Suggestion: use correct noun 'bike lanes', capitalize proper nouns, and form complete sentences with subject + verb + object for clarity.