自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and avoid filler words. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking phrase (e.g., “so” or “because”) and keep under five sentences. For example, correct tense (“I was a child”), and use “got older” instead of “get older.”

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was safer to wait until I got older. As a result, I usually went to school by bus or on foot, which was convenient because the bus stop was near my home.

建議: Improve sentence structure, grammar and reduce fillers. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words like “because” and “also.” Use correct comparative form (“cheaper than”) and clarify the phrase about traffic (e.g., “when there is heavy traffic”).

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheaper than most other vehicles and require less fuel. Also, they are easier to use in heavy traffic, so many people prefer them for short trips.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was such a child because my parents thought it was safer to wait until I get older.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was safer to wait until I got older.

The sentence mixes past ('didn't have', 'thought') with present tense 'get'. Use past tense 'got' to maintain consistent past-time reference. Also 'such a child' is unnatural; 'a child' is correct. Suggestion: keep all time-related verbs in the past when describing past events.

× Uh, so I went to school, uh, by bus or walked.

✓ So I went to school by bus or on foot.

The original mixes forms 'by bus' (correct) and 'walked' (verb) incorrectly in a list. For parallel structure, use two noun phrases or two verb forms consistently. 'On foot' pairs naturally with 'by bus'. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× Yes. I think bikes are popular in my country because uh, it's very cheap than other vehicles and uh, it's uh, easy to uh, go uh, when uh, traffic.

✓ Yes. I think bikes are popular in my country because they are much cheaper than other vehicles and they are easy to use when there is traffic.

Multiple errors: 'it's very cheap than' is incorrect comparative structure and wrong subject (bikes plural so use 'they' and 'are'); use 'much cheaper than' for comparisons (Grammar Problem Type 25 also relates but listed here as quantifier/comparison). 'Easy to go when traffic' is ungrammatical—use 'easy to use when there is traffic' and include the verb 'is' for 'traffic' or say 'in traffic'. Suggestion: match plural subject with plural verb/pronoun, use 'much/far + comparative' and provide a proper verb and clause for 'when there is traffic'.