自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid hesitations/fillers. Also correct tense consistency (use past simple consistently) and give a precise duration rather than uncertain numbers. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words (for example, 'also' or 'in fact') to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to school every day, which took about 10–15 minutes. I enjoyed trying simple tricks on the way; in fact, I once managed to ride for a short distance without using my hands. Riding was a fun part of my childhood.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, using present or past tense correctly. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give one or two specific supporting facts or examples with linking words ('however', 'for example'). Avoid vague time references and filler words. Provide a brief explanation of why popularity changed (e.g., more cars, urbanisation).

範例: I don’t think bikes are as popular now as they used to be. In the 1990s many families relied on bicycles for short trips, but with rising car ownership and urbanisation, people prefer cars today. For example, there used to be a wedding custom of giving the bride a bike, which shows how common they once were.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' in this affirmative past statement is unnecessary and non-idiomatic. Simple past 'had' correctly expresses possession in the past. Use auxiliary 'did' for negatives or questions only.

× I used to bike to school and it was, I think, uh, 10 minutes or 9:50 to 15 minutes bike ride.

✓ I used to bike to school and it was, I think, about 10 to 15 minutes' bike ride.

The phrase '9:50 to 15 minutes' is unclear and mixes formats. Use 'about 10 to 15 minutes' for an approximate duration. Also possessive 'minutes'' is required before 'bike ride' to show duration (or rephrase as 'a 10- to 15-minute bike ride').

× It was pretty enjoyable.

✓ It was pretty enjoyable.

Sentence is grammatically correct and matches past context; no change needed.

× I always try to do different tricks when I was, umm, biking to school.

✓ I always tried to do different tricks when I was biking to school.

Mixing present 'always try' with past time clause 'when I was biking' causes a tense mismatch. Use past tense 'always tried' to match the time frame. Also 'biking' is correct as the -ing form after 'was'.

× I think at one point I was able to, umm, bike without my hands.

✓ I think at one point I was able to bike without using my hands.

'Bike without my hands' is understandable but awkward; 'without using my hands' is clearer. Tense 'was able to' correctly indicates past ability; 'I think' keeps it tentative in present, which is acceptable.

× I think they used to be pretty popular, but not alone, not anymore.

✓ I think they used to be pretty popular, but not anymore.

'Not alone' is unclear and unnecessary here. The intended meaning is likely 'not anymore'; remove 'not alone.' The rest correctly uses 'used to' for past habitual state.

× Nowadays, I believe in the 1990s, umm, people used more bikes and less cars.

✓ In the 1990s, people used more bikes and fewer cars.

'Nowadays' conflicts with 'in the 1990s' (different time frames); remove 'Nowadays.' Also use 'fewer' with countable nouns ('cars') rather than 'less.' Keep 'used' for past habit.

× So there was this popular tradition where when people get married, they need to get, uh, the bride, a bike or umm.

✓ There was a popular tradition that when people got married they had to give the bride a bike.

Tense consistency: 'there was' (past) requires the subordinate clause in past tense ('got married', 'had to give'). 'Need to get' is present and should be changed to 'had to give' to reflect past tradition. Also simplify word order: 'give the bride a bike' is clearer than 'get the bride a bike.'