自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense and article errors (e.g., "a junior high school"). Avoid filler words like "so."

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in junior high school. I used it mainly to ride to my piano lessons, and sometimes I rode with friends on weekends, which helped me save money and stay active.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words. Correct repetitions and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "motorists" instead of "workers and drivers"). Explain consequences or give an example to strengthen the answer.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. However, because many cyclists share busy roads with cars, it can be dangerous for both cyclists and motorists; for example, during rush hour there are often near-misses at intersections.

× I had a bike when I was in a junior high schools and I used to use it to go to take piano lessons, so.

✓ I had a bike when I was in junior high school, and I used to use it to go to piano lessons.

The phrase 'a junior high schools' mixes singular and plural; 'a' requires singular 'school'. Also 'go to take piano lessons' is wordy/incorrect; use 'go to piano lessons' or 'take piano lessons'. Remove the trailing filler 'so'. Improve article and noun number agreement and simplify the verb phrase. Suggestion: use 'in junior high school' and 'go to piano lessons.'

× Yes, I think it's very popular in my country, but because of it, it it sometimes annoying for workers and drivers.

✓ Yes, I think they're very popular in my country, but because of them, they are sometimes annoying for workers and drivers.

The student refers to 'bikes' (plural). Using 'it's' and 'it' is incorrect pronoun agreement. Replace with plural pronouns 'they'/'them'. Also expand contraction 'they're' or 'they are' for clarity. Correct pronoun agreement with the plural noun.

× So it's it's quite dangerous and difficult to use both cars and bikes.

✓ So it's quite dangerous and difficult for cars and bikes to share the road.

The sentence repeats 'it's' and uses 'to use both cars and bikes' which is awkward. Rephrase to clarify that cars and bikes share the road. Maintain singular 'it's' as a dummy subject but clarify the agents and action: 'for cars and bikes to share the road.' This fixes pronoun repetition and improves clarity.