自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g., "started to practice" not "started to practicing") and remove repetitions.

範例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, but I wasn't very keen on riding it at first. However, when my father organised friendly races with my brother, I practised regularly and gradually became more confident on two wheels.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, use linking words accurately, and provide a specific reason or example. Avoid repeating words ("because because"). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "primary school children" instead of "elementary students") and correct phrasing ("after school" not "after the school").

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many primary school children cycle home or play on bikes after school. For example, I often see groups of children riding around the neighbourhood playground in the late afternoon.

× I started to practicing by by how to ride a bike a lot.

✓ I started practicing how to ride a bike a lot.

The verb 'start' can be followed by either the infinitive (to practice) or the gerund (practicing), but not a combination 'to practicing'. Remove 'to' and the duplicate 'by' to form the correct gerund phrase. Also remove the extra 'by' and reorder to 'practicing how to ride a bike' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'started practicing' or 'started to practice', and avoid repeating words.

× all elementary students are cycling a lot after the school and they hang around in the playground.

✓ all elementary students cycle a lot after school and hang around in the playground.

The phrase 'after the school' is incorrect here; general time expressions with school usually omit the article: 'after school'. Also 'are cycling a lot' is grammatically possible but less natural for a habitual action; use simple present 'cycle' for habitual activities. Removing the auxiliary 'are' makes the sentence clearer. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions: 'students cycle a lot after school'.

× Therefore the bike is pretty popular.

✓ Therefore bikes are pretty popular.

Using 'the bike' suggests a specific single bike, which is incorrect when referring to bicycles in general. Use plural 'bikes' and plural verb 'are' to indicate general popularity. Suggestion: Use plural nouns without articles for general statements about a category: 'Bikes are pretty popular.'