自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, remove filler sounds (uh, umm), correct small grammar errors, and use precise vocabulary. Use one or two short supporting details and connect them with a linking word (for example, 'but' or 'so'). Also keep responses to under five sentences.

範例: Yes. I had a bike as a child — a four-wheeled training bike. My father taught my sister and me to ride it, but I never learned to balance on a two-wheeler until I retried when I was about twenty.

建議: Avoid repetition and fillers, and organize the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct the comparative phrase about affordability (cars are more expensive) and ensure grammar (e.g., 'are usually quite large' → 'are usually quite large' is fine but link with 'because').

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular, especially around universities. Many students use them because campuses are large and parking is limited, whereas owning a car is much more expensive and less practical for short trips.

× my dad used to teach me how to uh, ride a bike with along with my sister umm,

✓ my dad used to teach me how to ride a bike along with my sister,

Incorrect insertion of 'with' before 'along with' created redundancy and interruption. Use either 'with' or 'along with', not both. Also remove filler 'uh' and place commas correctly. Suggestion: 'teach me how to ride a bike along with my sister.'

× but then I never really got to drive the two wheels bike and had to start again at the age of like 20.

✓ but then I never really learned to ride a two-wheeled bike and had to start again at about 20.

The phrase 'got to drive' is unnatural for learning to ride; use 'learned to ride'. 'Two wheels bike' needs past participle/adjective form 'two-wheeled'. 'at the age of like 20' is colloquial; use 'at about 20'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and appropriate verbs for learning actions.

× Umm, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in the university area.

✓ Umm, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in university areas.

'the university area' implies a specific area; general statement requires plural 'university areas' or 'on university campuses'. Use plural or 'on campus' for generalization.

× I think most of college students tend to travel around the campus using bikes because the campus are usually quite large.

✓ I think most college students tend to travel around campus using bikes because campuses are usually quite large.

'most of college students' should be 'most college students' (no 'of'). 'the campus' and 'campus are' are inconsistent: use plural 'campuses are' when generalizing, and 'around campus' is idiomatic. Ensure subject and verb agree in number.

× But like not really umm uh, affordable with the car.

✓ But cars aren't really affordable.

The original fragment is ungrammatical and uses wrong preposition 'with'. To express affordability of cars, use 'cars aren't really affordable' or 'it isn't really affordable to have a car.' Suggestion: form a complete sentence and choose appropriate preposition if needed (e.g., 'to have a car').