自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and complete: start with a clear topic sentence, add a brief reason or a short detail using a linking word, and split into shorter sentences to improve clarity. Avoid run-on sentence and give a little extra relevant detail (e.g., when or how you felt about it).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, it broke after a few months, so I stopped riding it. I remember feeling disappointed because I liked to ride to the park with my friends.

建議: Organize the response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Be more specific: give one or two reasons with brief examples or comparisons, and keep sentences concise. Replace repetitive phrases and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "exercise" -> "for exercise and commuting").

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. Many people use them for exercise and short commutes, especially in cities where traffic is heavy. For example, families often own at least one bike for children to ride to school or to the local market.

× Yes I had a bike when I was a child it was broken so I didn't ride anymore

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was broken, so I didn't ride it anymore.

Run-on sentence and missing object: The original combines two independent clauses without proper punctuation and omits the object 'it' after 'ride'. Also add commas and periods to separate ideas. Use 'didn't ride it anymore' to indicate stopping riding that specific bike. Suggestion: separate clauses with a period or semicolon and include the object when using 'ride'.

× Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people like to do the exercise and bicycle is more common for every household to have it so they're using it a lot

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people like to exercise, and bicycles are common in most households, so they are used a lot.

Multiple issues: 'do the exercise' is unnatural — use the verb 'exercise' without 'do the'. 'Bicycle is more common for every household to have it' is awkward and uses incorrect prepositions and structure. Use 'common in most households' to express prevalence. Also ensure plural agreement ('bicycles are') and replace contractions for clarity. Suggestion: break into two clauses, use 'exercise', 'common in most households', and 'used' to improve grammar and clarity.