自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct grammar (use past simple correctly) and reduce redundancy. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid irrelevant verbs like “read” for bikes and check word choice (e.g., “painted” not “painting”).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was painted bright blue, which was my favorite color, and I loved riding it in the park every weekend with my family.

建議: Fix subject-verb agreement and make examples specific and concise. Start with a direct opinion, then use linking words (e.g., “for example” or “for instance”) and give one clear, relevant example. Avoid hesitation fillers like “umm.”

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles for deliveries; companies like Foodpanda and Deliveroo rely on bike couriers in cities.

× Certainly, yes, I did had a bike when I was a child and I loved my bike because it was in painting color and it's my favorite color and I still remember that I used to read it every day in the park with my family.

✓ Certainly, yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I loved my bike because it was painted my favorite color, and I still remember that I used to ride it every day in the park with my family.

The auxiliary 'did' with a past tense verb 'had' is incorrect; use simple past 'I had' rather than 'I did had'. 'in painting color' is ungrammatical; use 'painted my favorite color' or 'painted in my favorite color'. 'it's my favorite color' mixes present with past context; change to 'my favorite color' to keep past focus. 'read it' is likely a wrong verb for a bike; context suggests 'ride it'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary 'did' when forming simple past affirmative sentences, use 'painted' to describe appearance, maintain consistent tense, and choose correct verb (ride) for using a bike.

× Yes, I think bikes is actually really popular in my country because I've seen bikes are being used for certain things and certain purposes such as umm. People in my country use bikes to deliver food such as the Job Food Panda or Deliverio.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are actually very popular in my country because I have seen bikes being used for certain purposes. People in my country use bikes to deliver food for services such as Foodpanda or Deliveroo.

The subject 'bikes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'I've seen bikes are being used' is awkward; use 'I have seen bikes being used' or 'I have seen that bikes are used'. 'such as umm.' is filler and should be removed. 'Job Food Panda or Deliverio' are incorrect company names; likely meant 'Foodpanda' and 'Deliveroo' and 'to deliver food for services such as...' Suggestions: match plural subjects with plural verbs, simplify progressive constructions to 'being used', remove filler words, and use correct names for companies.