自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting reasons using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear words (e.g. 'faupe'). Use past tense consistently for past situations.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My mother was afraid that I might get hurt while riding, so she didn't allow me to use one. As a result, I learned to walk and use buses to get around.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g. 'commuting', 'leisure', 'exercise') and avoid filler words like 'maybe' and 'like'. Keep it to two or three concise sentences.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use bicycles for commuting to work and for short trips because they are cheap and convenient. In addition, some people ride for exercise and leisure on weekends.

× Actually, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my mother she is afraid and have a faupe from riding to bicycles so no I, don't have I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Actually, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my mother was afraid and had a fear of riding bicycles, so no, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

Problems: redundant pronoun 'my mother she' and incorrect pronoun/verb agreement with 'have a faupe' (intended 'had a fear'). Also mixed tenses and extra fragments ('so no I, don't have I didn't have a bike'). Correction: remove the redundant pronoun ('my mother she' -> 'my mother'), use past tense for mother's fear to match 'didn't have' ('was afraid' and 'had a fear'), and simplify the final clause to 'so no, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.' Suggestion: keep subjects single (avoid 'my mother she'), ensure verbs match tense of narrative (use past for past situations), and use clear vocabulary ('fear' instead of 'faupe').

× Yes, I think yes because a lot of people use the bike for maybe getting their giving their jobs also to have like a trip or going to out going outside and

✓ Yes, I think so because a lot of people use bikes to get to their jobs, to go on trips, or to go outside for leisure.

Problems: incorrect verb forms and awkward expressions ('use the bike for maybe getting their giving their jobs', 'going to out going outside'). Also singular/plural mismatch ('the bike' vs 'bikes'). Correction: use the infinitive 'to get' for purpose, plural 'bikes' to match 'a lot of people', and clearer verbs 'to go on trips' and 'to go outside for leisure.' Suggestion: use simple infinitive phrases to express purpose (use X to do Y), keep noun number consistent with 'a lot of people' (plural), and avoid redundant words (remove 'maybe', 'like').