自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and use correct tense and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then one or two supporting sentences with correct past/future tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and long run-on sentences. Also correct grammar: use past tense for childhood and simple past or future for buying. For example, say you didn’t have a bike as a child, explain why briefly, then mention when you got one or plan to get one.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Later, after I started working, I bought one with my own savings, and I enjoyed riding it because it gave me freedom and helped me save on transport.

建議: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and use linking words for clarity. Avoid vague phrases like “one more emotional word” and fix grammar (subject–verb agreement, count nouns). Provide concrete details (who uses bikes, why they are popular, and a short comment about safety). Keep to 2–3 sentences max.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many adults and teenagers use them because they are affordable and convenient for short trips; however, traffic safety is a major concern because accidents are common on busy roads.

× No I haven't but when I am adult and I am doing a job then then I buy both a bike by my own on money and salary and it was very enjoyable.

✓ No, I didn't, but when I was an adult and had a job I bought a bike with my own salary, and it was very enjoyable.

The student is describing a past situation, so past tense verbs are required. 'I haven't' (present perfect) is incorrect here; use 'I didn't' or 'I did not have' if referring to the past. 'When I am adult' should be 'when I was an adult' (past tense and article 'an'). 'I am doing a job' should be 'had a job' (past simple). 'I buy' should be 'I bought' (past simple). 'By my own on money and salary' is incorrect preposition and phrasing; use 'with my own salary'. Suggestions: match all verbs to past tense when describing past events, include articles ('an adult'), and use correct prepositions ('with').

× Yes, in our country the bikes are very popular and maximum adults adult children are using the bike.

✓ Yes, in our country bikes are very popular, and most adults and children use bikes.

There is a subject-verb agreement and word choice problem. 'Maximum adults adult children are using the bike' is ungrammatical. Use 'most' instead of 'maximum', plural noun 'adults and children', and simple present 'use' for general facts. Also plural 'bikes' after 'use'. Suggestions: use 'most' for majority, keep subject and verb agreement (most adults and children use bikes).

× But one more emotional word is is they always accidents and you know in a the very largest.

✓ However, there are many accidents; they happen very often and can be very serious.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'One more emotional word is is' is incorrect structure and repetition. 'They always accidents' lacks a verb and correct noun phrase; use 'there are many accidents' or 'accidents happen'. 'In a the very largest' is meaningless; likely intended 'very serious' or 'most severe'. Suggestions: restructure sentences for clarity, use 'there are' for existence, and include appropriate adjectives like 'serious' or adverbs like 'very often'.