自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one clear reason or brief detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "all through my life" and "ever since I was a kid" say the same thing). Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g. "but", "however"). Keep to a maximum of 3–4 short sentences.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. My older cousin had one, but we never learned to ride it, so I missed out on that experience. As a result, I didn't get into cycling when I was young.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with accurate, specific details. Correct unclear or incorrect phrases ("especially from where I came from" → "especially in my hometown"). Avoid vague or incorrect statements ("the government plays two roads" is unclear). Use linking words like "for example" or "also" and keep to 3–4 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, particularly in my hometown. For example, Birnham Park has dedicated cycling paths, and many people ride for exercise and commuting. In recent years the city has also improved bike lanes to encourage cycling.

× Unfortunately I did not own a single bike all through my life ever since I was a kid.

✓ Unfortunately I did not own a single bike when I was a child.

The original mixes past simple with 'ever since', which requires a present perfect continuous or simple for ongoing actions. The context is a past state limited to childhood, so use a clear past time expression. Suggestion: replace 'all through my life ever since I was a kid' with 'when I was a child' to match past-tense reference and avoid tense conflict.

× However my older cousin did own one but even if she did own one we never learned how to ride it.

✓ However, my older cousin had one, but even though she had one we never learned how to ride it.

Using 'did own' is an emphatic past-simple form but is awkward here; 'had' is the normal past-tense verb for possession. Also 'even if' expresses a hypothetical; 'even though' is correct for a real past fact. Suggestion: use 'had' and 'even though' for clear past narration.

× Bikes are extremely popular in our country, especially from where I came from.

✓ Bikes are extremely popular in our country, especially where I come from.

The phrase 'from where I came from' is redundant and the preposition choice is awkward. For current general statements about a place of origin, use 'where I come from'. This keeps tense consistent and avoids double 'from'.

× There's this park called Birnham Park where there are roads designated for biking.

✓ There is a park called Birnham Park where roads are designated for biking.

'There's this park' is informal; 'There is a park' is more appropriate. Also 'where there are roads designated' is wordy — reduce to 'where roads are designated' for clarity and correct article use. Suggest making the sentence more concise and formal.

× And if I'm not mistaken, the government plays two roads.

✓ And if I'm not mistaken, the government has built (or maintains) two bike lanes/paths.

The verb 'plays' is incorrect with 'roads' — likely a wrong lexical choice. The intended meaning is that the government provides, builds, or maintains cycling infrastructure. Suggest using verbs like 'has built', 'maintains', or 'provides' and specify 'bike lanes' or 'bike paths' for clarity.