自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu tính rõ ràng và tự nhiên; nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp (topic sentence), sửa lỗi từ vựng (bike vs bag), dùng thì đúng, và cung cấp thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Ví dụ: nói rõ đó là một chiếc xe đạp 3 bánh, khi nào bạn dùng nó và bây giờ bạn có còn dùng không. Tránh các lỗi phát âm lặp từ và các từ thừa như “and I and now I”.

範例: Yes. My parents bought me a small three-wheeled bike when I was five. I used it every day to ride around our neighborhood until I was eight, but I rarely use it now because I prefer walking or taking the bus.

建議: Câu trả lời nêu được lý do nhưng có sự lặp từ, ngập ngừng và cấu trúc chưa mạch lạc. Cần bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng liên từ để nối các lý do (for example, moreover) và đưa ví dụ cụ thể để minh họa. Tránh tiếng lắp và lặp từ như “are are used”. Có thể thêm so sánh nhỏ với phương tiện khác để tăng tính thuyết phục.

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular, especially among students. For example, many students prefer bikes because they are inexpensive and help them stay fit. Moreover, bicycles are convenient for short trips around campus or to nearby shops, unlike cars which are costly to maintain.

× When I was a child, my parents gave me a bag which has three wheels and I and now I rarely write them.

✓ When I was a child, my parents gave me a bike that has three wheels, and now I rarely ride it.

The original sentence has multiple errors: wrong noun 'bag' instead of 'bike', incorrect relative clause tense and choice ('which has' is acceptable but 'that has' is more natural for defining clauses), wrong pronoun order 'I and now I' and wrong verb 'write' instead of 'ride', and incorrect object number agreement 'them' for a single bike. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'bike', use 'that has three wheels' for a defining clause, place the conjunction correctly ('and now'), use the correct verb 'ride', and match the pronoun to singular 'it'. Also ensure tense consistency by keeping past for 'gave' and present for current habit 'rarely ride'.

× I think bikes are popular in my country because it's, umm, suitable for students.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because they are suitable for students.

The pronoun 'it' wrongly refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use the plural pronoun 'they'. Also remove filler words for clarity. Keep present simple 'are' to state a general fact.

× Umm, many students are are used, uh, many students use them because they are cheap, good for fitness and convenience for short trips around town.

✓ Many students use them because they are cheap, good for fitness, and convenient for short trips around town.

The original contains repetition ('are are'), incorrect passive fragment 'used' misplaced, and awkward coordination. Correct by using active 'use them' once, remove fillers, and use parallel structure in the list: 'cheap, good for fitness, and convenient'. Ensure adjectives match nouns ('convenient' describes the bikes).