自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct tense and articles, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. For example, use past simple with correct article and word order, and replace vague phrases like "the market wasn't developed" with a clearer reason such as "bikes were expensive or hard to find."

範例: No, I didn't have a bicycle when I was a child. At that time, bicycles were expensive and there were few shops selling them, so my family couldn't afford one.

建議: Improve natural phrasing and add a linking word plus a specific example or comparison. Use a stronger topic sentence, avoid awkward phrases like "play bikes," and include one concrete reason or example to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country today. For example, many children ride bikes to school or to the park, and this helps them get regular exercise and fresh air.

× I didn't have a bike when I was child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

Missing the article 'a' before the noun 'child' causes an unnatural sentence structure; the correct phrase is 'a child' to indicate being a young person. Add 'a' to follow standard English noun phrase structure.

× The market wasn't developed as like today and there are not so many places to sell bikes when I was child a.

✓ The market wasn't as developed as it is today, and there weren't many places to buy bikes when I was a child.

Multiple issues: incorrect comparative structure 'as like' should be 'as ... as' and present reference must be 'as it is today'; tense and agreement errors: use past tense 'weren't' for places in the past; wrong verb 'sell' (places to buy bikes is more natural); misplaced article 'a' and missing 'a' before 'child'. Reorder and correct to a clear past-tense comparison: 'The market wasn't as developed as it is today, and there weren't many places to buy bikes when I was a child.' Suggestions: use 'as ... as' for comparisons, match tense for past situations, and use 'buy' for customers purchasing.

× Bikes are nowadays very popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country nowadays.

Word order: 'nowadays' is typically placed at the end or beginning of the sentence rather than between subject and verb. While not strictly ungrammatical, moving 'nowadays' to the end improves naturalness: 'Bikes are very popular in my country nowadays.' Keep present simple to describe current general facts.

× The kids like to play bikes and they spend time outside and it's also very beneficial for their health.

✓ Kids like to ride bikes and spend time outside, which is also very beneficial for their health.

'Play bikes' is incorrect collocation; use 'ride bikes.' Also combine clauses more naturally and refer to the action 'spend time outside' as the subject of 'is beneficial' by using 'which' to link the clauses. Suggestion: use correct verb collocations ('ride bikes') and connective pronouns ('which') to clarify what is beneficial.