自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and tense errors, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I often saw colorful bikes in TV commercials, which made me want one. For example, I remember wanting a small red bicycle with training wheels because my friend had one and we used to imagine riding to the park together.

建議: Good direct answer and clear reasons. Improve by using a linking word to connect reasons, vary vocabulary slightly, and add a specific example or brief comparison to strengthen the response.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are more affordable than cars and easier to park. For instance, in my neighborhood most families own at least one bicycle, and many people use them for short trips to the market or school rather than driving.

× I did not have a bike when I was a child, yet I remember, uh, I have seen all those tea, uh, bikes in the TV commercial and I wanted to have one in my childhood.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child, yet I remember seeing all those toy bikes in the TV commercial and wanting one when I was a child.

Present tense issue (ID 6) and Verb + -ing form (ID 8): The student mixes past simple ('did not have', 'wanted') with present perfect ('I have seen'), which is inconsistent for a past-period memory. For a completed past action relative to childhood, use past simple or past continuous. Also, 'remember' followed by a past event is naturally followed by the -ing form 'remember seeing' rather than 'I have seen'. 'Tea' appears to be a misheard word; 'toy' fits context. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense and gerund after 'remember' when referring to recollection of seeing something in the past: 'I remember seeing...' and keep 'wanted' to match 'was a child.'

× Absolutely yes. I think bikes are very popular in my country as they are more affordable than a car and I see bikes almost in every household in my country.

✓ Absolutely. I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are more affordable than cars and I see bikes in almost every household.

Incorrect use of quantifiers (ID 14) and Singular and plural issue (ID 1): 'a car' is not the best general comparison; use plural 'cars' when making a general statement. 'See bikes almost in every household' needs word order adjustment to 'in almost every household.' Also 'Absolutely yes' is redundant; 'Absolutely' is sufficient. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general comparisons ('cars') and place 'almost' before the phrase it modifies ('in almost every household').