自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and gives personal detail, but it contains hesitation (repeated phrases), minor redundancy, and a slightly awkward final clause. To improve, remove fillers, avoid repetition, and make the final point more concise and natural. Also use one clear linking phrase when adding the reason why you no longer have a bike.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride in the second year of primary school, and I enjoyed cycling around the neighborhood. However, I don't own a bike now because the public bicycle system here is very convenient and affordable.

建議: Your answer addresses the question and gives a specific reason, but it suffers from repetition, some awkward phrasing, and informal wording ("1st 30 minutes"). To improve, state a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, "because" and "for example") and more natural phrasing. Replace repetitions with concise expressions and give one concrete example or effect.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Taiwan because we have a convenient public bike-rental system. For example, the first 30 minutes of each rental are free, so many people use bikes for short trips and you can often see crowded bike lanes in cities.

× Uh, but I don't have a bike anymore now, since we can ride, since we can ride, uh, the public bicycle system these days.

✓ But I don't have a bike anymore, since we can use the public bicycle system these days.

The original sentence has awkward verb choice and repetition. 'Ride the public bicycle system' is incorrect because people use or rent bicycles from a system; 'use' is more natural. Also remove duplicate phrase 'since we can ride' and the redundant 'now'. Suggestion: say 'I don't have a bike anymore, since we can use the public bicycle system these days.' This keeps present tense and clarity.

× Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Taiwan since we have the public, since we have a very convenient public, a bicycle renting system, besides the 1st 30 minutes of the rent is it's free, so we can actually see a lot of people riding bicycles on the street.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Taiwan since we have a very convenient public bicycle rental system; the first 30 minutes are free, so we can see a lot of people riding bicycles on the street.

Multiple article and noun-form errors: 'a public, a bicycle renting system' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'a very convenient public bicycle rental system.' '1st 30 minutes of the rent is it's free' has article and verb problems; correct to 'the first 30 minutes are free.' 'Minutes' is plural so use plural verb 'are.' Also remove unnecessary filler and clarify punctuation. This preserves present tense and meaning.