自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a direct topic sentence then add 1–2 specific supporting details (reason, brief example or memory). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep it natural. Also expand a bit (but no more than 5 short sentences).

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family lived in a very small apartment so there wasn’t space to store one, and my parents preferred me to walk to nearby places. However, I sometimes borrowed a cousin’s bike on weekends, which I enjoyed.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give specific reasons or examples and use linking words (for example, because, therefore, however). Avoid vague phrases like “my friend” unless explaining relevance. Keep to under five sentences and use more natural wording.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people ride bikes to markets and schools, especially in smaller towns, so cycling is a practical choice for daily travel.

× Yes, my friend, more convenient in my country.

✓ Yes, my friends, they are more convenient in my country.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb, causing a sentence structure error (map to ID 26). The speaker likely means that bicycles are more convenient for people in their country. Adding the plural subject 'my friends' (or 'people') and the verb 'are' creates a complete sentence: 'Yes, my friends, they are more convenient in my country.' Alternatively: 'Yes, bicycles are more convenient in my country.' To improve, ensure each sentence has an explicit subject and verb and that the form matches plurality (use 'are' for plural subjects).