自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be consistent in tense and word choice, start with a clear topic sentence, limit to 3–4 concise sentences, and add one specific detail. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make the answer coherent. Avoid unnecessary words like “Thanks” at the end.

範例: I didn’t have a bicycle as a child; I had a simple cycle instead because my family couldn’t afford a proper bike. I loved cycling with friends around the neighbourhood, and we often rode to the park after school for exercise. Because of those rides, I became quite confident riding on busy streets.

建議: Answer directly, use clear vocabulary and correct collocations (e.g. “bicycles are popular,” not “bikes prefer smart roads”), and give a specific reason or example. Use a linking word to connect reason and result. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, bicycles are popular in my country because they are cheap and easy to use in congested cities. For example, commuters often use bikes to avoid traffic jams, so they can reach work faster and save money on transport.

× No, I don't have a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use past tense. Using present tense 'don't have' is inconsistent with the time frame. Use 'didn't have' to match past reference. Suggested improvement: Pay attention to time markers (when you were a child) and use past tense verbs accordingly.

× Instead I have a cycle when I was a child because I love to cycle.

✓ Instead I had a cycle when I was a child because I loved to cycle.

Mixed tenses: 'have' and 'love' are present tense but the time reference is in the past. Both verbs should be past tense ('had', 'loved'). Suggested improvement: Keep verbs consistent with the past time frame; change present tense verbs to past when talking about past events.

× I love to play or roam around doing cycling with my other friends because that was a physical exercise and I needed it.

✓ I loved to play or roam around cycling with my friends because it was physical exercise and I needed it.

Multiple issues: tense inconsistency ('love' should be 'loved'), awkward phrasing 'doing cycling' (use 'cycling' alone), 'my other friends' is redundant ('my friends' is correct), and 'that was a physical exercise' is wordy — use 'it was physical exercise'. Suggested improvement: Use 'cycling' rather than 'doing cycling', keep past tense, and avoid redundant words.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because bikes prefer smart roads and are convenient for a person to travel from one place to another in a traffic where cars are stuck into it.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are suitable for narrow roads and are convenient for people to travel from one place to another when cars are stuck in traffic.

Problems addressed: 'bikes prefer smart roads' is incorrect — inanimate objects cannot 'prefer'; use 'they are suitable for narrow roads' or similar. 'A person' should be pluralized to 'people' for general statements. 'In a traffic' and 'stuck into it' are incorrect preposition and phrasing — use 'stuck in traffic'. Also keep present tense appropriate for a general statement. Suggested improvement: Avoid attributing preferences to objects, use suitable/adapted, use 'people' for generalization, and use correct prepositions ('stuck in traffic').