自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 구성하세요. 첫 문장에서 직접적으로 질문에 답한 뒤, 연결어를 사용해 구체적 세부사항(누가 가르쳤는지, 언제 배웠는지, 어떤 느낌이었는지)을 2~3문장으로 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 채움말(umm)과 중복(when I was young/when I was little, play with bicycle 등)을 피하고 문장 끝을 완결되게 만드세요.

範例: Yes, I did. My father taught me how to ride when I was about six, and I practiced in our neighborhood every weekend. Because he was patient and encouraging, I quickly became confident on two wheels and spent a lot of time riding around with friends.

建議: 의견을 먼저 명확히 밝힌 뒤 이유와 구체적 예시를 논리적으로 연결하세요. 반복되는 표현("in my country" 등)을 줄이고 시제와 관사 사용을 교정하세요. linking words(For example, Also, Therefore)를 사용해 문장 흐름을 개선하고, 구체적 수단(대중교통과의 비교, 자전거 대여 시스템의 장점 등)을 포함하세요.

範例: Yes, they are quite popular. Many people use bicycles for short trips because they are cheap and convenient. For example, our city has a well-developed bike-sharing system, so I often rent a bike to commute to work or go to the market.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was young umm when I was little my dad usually taught me a lot how to ride a bike, so I am interested in playing with bicycle so I.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was young. When I was little, my dad usually taught me how to ride it, so I became interested in riding bicycles.

The sentence has run-on and awkward structure; punctuation and conjunctions are needed. 'Umm' is filler and should be removed in written form. 'Taught me a lot how to ride a bike' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'taught me how to ride it' or 'taught me a lot about riding.' 'Playing with bicycle' is incorrect collocation; use 'riding bicycles.' Use past tense 'became interested' to show change resulting from past events.

× Yes, I think the bikes are popular.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular.

Using the definite article 'the' implies specific bikes; general statements about a category use the plural noun without 'the' or use 'bicycles'. Also 'bikes' is informal; 'bicycles' is more appropriate in this context.

× In my country many people used bicycle in short distance and in my country the borrowing bicycle system is very good, so I also used bicycle in many times.

✓ In my country, many people use bicycles for short distances, and the bicycle-sharing system is very good, so I also used bicycles many times.

Mixed tenses: general habits should be in present simple ('use'), while personal past actions can be past simple ('used'). 'Used bicycle' lacks plural and article; use 'use bicycles' or 'use a bicycle.' 'Short distance' should be 'short distances.' 'Borrowing bicycle system' is awkward; common term is 'bicycle-sharing system.' 'In many times' is incorrect; use 'many times.'